Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There has been an ongoing issue regarding the declining number of people flying. Although flying can exert a detrimentla effect on environmental wellbeing, by increasing the amount of carbon emissions. Stopping fly altogether can reduce global economic intergration, and the opportunities of aquring knowledge. I therefore think the environmental benefits don't outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses.

One of the key factor against this issue is that the reduction number of fly can exacerbate global economic intergration. To eleborate, travelling by plane plays a pivotal role on expanding businesses globally, should people reduce travelling, it can take away the opportunities of global expansion of their businesses. Furthermore, by travelling plane people can interact with other businessman from other countries, and they can not only share their ideas with them, but they also can get proper guidelines to expand their businesses.For example, if a Bngladeshi import-export businessman stop travelling by plane, he wouldn't be able to export goods from India, and that would undermine the situation of his import and export business. Taken all these points into account I think people should't stop flying all together.

Another compelling factor against this issue is that by stopping fly, people can lose

their opportunities to seek knowledge. Put differently, travelling by plane has bridge the geographical gap, people can travel thousands of miles by plane, that makes it very convenient for the people who are willing to pursue their higher studies in abroad. Moreover, travelling by plane expose people to a large number of cultures and traditions compared to any other transportations, for that reason, people can fly to different countries and can observe various traditions, cultures, languages and lifestyles, which can significantly broaden their horizons. To illustrate, if a Bangladeshi travels to China he can observe chinese cultures and lifestyles, which can increase their overall knowledge about China. Hence, travelling by plane is very crucial to seek international knowledge.

In conclusion, eventhough aeroplanes substantially increase carbon emissions, totally stopping fly from aeroplane won't outweigh the disadvantages of it. Additionally, people need to fly to maintain their global intergrational businesses and to seek knowledge by travelling. Therefore, governments need to introduce policy to limit the number of fly of individuals over the year, this can strike a balance between environmental wellbeing and international connectivity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you believe the environmental benefits do not outweigh the disadvantages, and the conclusion maintains this view while proposing limits on flying as a compromise. You address both individuals and businesses through discussion of international business links and opportunities to study and learn about other cultures. These are relevant reasons, and the examples help illustrate them. However, the business example about a Bangladeshi trader exporting goods from India is not fully explained, and the education and cultural-learning points overlap without showing clearly why air travel is essential compared with alternatives. Develop each main idea with a more precise explanation and acknowledge the environmental gains before weighing them against the costs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting disadvantages, and a conclusion. Topic sentences such as “One of the key factor against this issue” and “Another compelling factor” signal the direction of each paragraph, while examples generally follow the claims they support. The conclusion also returns to the central position. However, some links feel mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “Moreover,” “Hence,” and “To illustrate,” and a few references are unclear, such as “this issue” and “that makes it very convenient.” The first body paragraph also moves quickly from business expansion to advice from other businessmen and then to trade. Use more precise referencing and make the relationship between each supporting point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “global economic integration,” “carbon emissions,” “geographical gap,” and “broaden their horizons.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and some less common expressions are appropriate. However, inaccurate spelling and word choice are noticeable: “detrimentla,” “intergration,” “aquring,” and “eleborate” reduce the impression of control. Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “stopping fly,” “travelling by plane plays a pivotal role on expanding,” and “number of fly.” Repeated reliance on “travelling by plane” limits flexibility. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, then vary expressions with terms such as “air travel” and “international flights.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “should people reduce travelling, it can take away the opportunities” and a concession in the conclusion beginning “even though.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. These include agreement and verb-form problems in “One of the key factor” and “travelling by plane expose people,” as well as article and preposition patterns in “pursue their higher studies in abroad” and “plays a pivotal role on expanding.” The opening fragment, “Although flying can exert a detrimental effect…,” is not joined to a main clause. Review sentence completeness, subject–verb agreement, and conditional verb forms; these corrections would make your varied structures more consistently accurate.

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