Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The process diagram illustrates different several goods formed from bamboo tree through industrial steps.

Overall,the process pass by nine steps, starting with the growing of the plants and finishing with fabric different types of cloths , during this process a key steps happening from harvesting to make soften fibres to crush it and finally fabric services.

Initially,the bamboo plants grow in spring season,then the palnt be ready to harvest by the farmer in autumn,after that the bamboo paper put into the strips machine to cut it, while this paper treat by add water and amine oxide to take soften fibres,furthermore,sperates long fibres from luquid by special equipemnt.So crush strips to fabric liquid pulp or spin it to make yarm and also weave it to make fabric , finally with all of this steps, a cloths can be produce suck as t-shirt and sucks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the process as having nine stages and mention the seasonal start and finished clothing, so the response includes some relevant main features. However, the account is only partial and several stages are confused or placed in the wrong order. For example, the diagram shows crushing the strips before filtering, then softening the fibres; your sentence suggests softening happens before separation and crushing. The overview also says “fabric different types of cloths” without clearly summarising the progression from planting to finished garments. The response is 143 words, below the required 150. To improve, describe the stages accurately in sequence and give a concise overview of the transformation from bamboo to yarn, fabric and clothing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response chronologically, using markers such as “Overall,” “Initially,” “after that,” and “finally.” This gives the reader some sense of a process, but the progression becomes difficult to follow when several stages are compressed into one long sentence and the order is unclear. The middle section moves between softening, filtering, crushing, spinning and weaving without clear links, while “So” does not establish a logical transition. Paragraphing is also absent, making the overview and stage-by-stage account hard to distinguish. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and process details, and connect each stage in the diagram’s exact order with clear, consistent sequencing language.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “harvest,” “strips,” “fibres,” “liquid pulp,” “spin,” and “weave,” which shows an attempt to describe the manufacturing process. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate enough to make parts difficult to understand: “bamboo paper,” “fabric services,” “sperates,” “luquid,” “yarm,” and “sucks” do not communicate the intended terms reliably. There is also repetition of general words such as “steps” and “fabric,” and some phrases are not natural, including “different several goods.” Build a more accurate process vocabulary and check spelling carefully; use precise terms such as “bamboo stalks,” “filter,” “yarn,” and “garments.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine stages using time clauses and connectors, but the response relies on a limited set of sentence patterns, and many sentences contain errors that obscure relationships between actions. For instance, “the palnt be ready to harvest” lacks an appropriate verb form, while “the bamboo paper put into the strips machine” is missing a passive auxiliary and has an unclear grammatical structure. The long final sentence also joins several actions without controlled clause structure. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and no clear sentence boundaries in places. Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions, such as “the stalks are cut into strips,” and use shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex ones.

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