Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

there is step by step method that making this bambo fabric Bamboo fabric is made up of bamboo plant in spring season it harvest in autumn .cut the plants by using harsh cutters and crush them till liquid pulp build .filter th liquid plup and seprate the fibres from liquid.For making fibres soften add some water and amine oxide laterly spin them carefully and make yarn then weave to make fabric and it convert in to clothes like shirts and socks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the process as making bamboo fabric and include several key stages: planting in spring, harvesting in autumn, crushing, filtering, softening, spinning and weaving. You also mention the final clothing products, which matches the diagram. However, the response is very brief and does not give a clear overview of the process as a whole or explain its sequence fully; cutting the bamboo into strips is omitted, and the harvesting and cutting details are not accurately described. The task requires at least 150 words, but this response contains 81, so it is substantially under length. To develop the report, cover all nine stages in order and add a concise overview distinguishing the growing and processing stages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The stages are presented in roughly the correct order, and words such as “laterly” and “then” attempt to show sequence. This gives the reader a basic sense of how the material becomes fabric and clothing. However, nearly the entire response is one run-on sequence, with little punctuation or paragraphing to separate the stages. Some transitions are unclear, particularly the move from filtering to softening. Organise the report into a short introduction and overview, followed by a clearly sequenced description of the stages. Use accurate linking phrases such as “After harvesting,” “The strips are then crushed,” and “Finally” to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvest,” “liquid pulp,” “fibres,” “yarn,” and “weave,” and these terms help communicate the main transformation. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “bambo,” “plup,” “seprate,” and “harsh cutters.” “Harsh cutters” is also an inaccurate description of the cutting equipment; the diagram simply shows bamboo being cut into strips. Aim for precise process language and check spelling carefully. Useful alternatives include “bamboo plants,” “cut into strips,” “separate the fibres,” and “finished garments,” rather than relying on vague or inaccurate phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe several stages in sequence, but it relies mainly on short clauses joined together, so the range of sentence structures is very limited. Frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and punctuation make the account difficult to read. For example, “it harvest in autumn” needs a passive form, while “For making fibres soften add some water” lacks a clear grammatical structure. The opening, “there is step by step method that making,” is also incomplete and unclear. Practise forming accurate passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The bamboo is harvested in autumn” and “Water and amine oxide are added to soften the fibres.” Use full stops to separate stages.

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