Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram illustrates how bambo fabric is made in nine process, for instance plan bambo,harvest, cut into strips, soften fibers,filter,crush strips.

Overall, the process of the bambo fibric is tooken by proper nine steps.Every steps is very important for this process.Although this process is very complicated, but is very crutial for many substance.

Firstly, planting bambo is very essential. While we do not get any bambo, without bambo how we will get fibrics. Secend steps is harvest.It is also a significant factor for a fibrics.After is process, then comes cut into strips.By cuting into many strips,we spin the bambo strips to make yem.

In addition,the most significant parts comes. And, that is Weave to make the fibrics.The more fibrics and collect the more clothes we can make.By this fibrics we can make so many things.Such as pants,shirts ect.

Finally, to collect the firbrics is very difficult but it is so very essential for many things.For instance we can make paper by it and make many cloths.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and mention several relevant stages, including planting, harvesting, cutting, crushing, filtering, spinning and weaving. However, the process is only partially reported, and some key details are missing or inaccurate. The diagram shows that the fibres are softened with water and amine oxide before they are spun into yarn; your account omits this treatment and incorrectly suggests that strips are spun directly. You also do not clearly describe the final step, where the fabric is made into clothing. The overview is vague (“every steps is very important”) and includes unsupported claims about the process being complicated and making paper. To improve, give a concise overview of the sequence and accurately explain the main stages shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and body paragraphs, and sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “After” and “Finally” help signal order. However, progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph lists stages out of sequence, and the later account jumps from cutting to spinning and then weaving, leaving filtering and fibre-softening unexplained. Some linking is mechanical or confusing, as in “After is process, then comes cut into strips” and “In addition, the most significant parts comes.” The final paragraph shifts to collecting fabric and making paper, which does not follow the diagram. Group the stages in their actual order and use clear links to show how each stage leads to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice problems that sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. The repeated forms “bambo,” “fibrics” and “cloths” obscure the key materials and products, while “tooked” and “crutial” are inaccurate forms. Some task-related terms are useful, including “harvest,” “strips” and “weave,” but several important process words are absent or misused. For example, “yem” does not clearly communicate yarn, and “collect the firbrics” is not an accurate description of the final stage. Build a small bank of precise process vocabulary and check spelling and collocations so the reader can follow the manufacturing stages without guessing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, and attempts at longer structures are often inaccurate. Errors occur in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement and articles, as in “The process … is tooken,” “Every steps is,” and “Although this process is very complicated, but is very crutial.” The sentence “While we do not get any bambo, without bambo how we will get fibrics” is difficult to follow because its clauses are not formed clearly. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around commas and sentence boundaries. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with clauses such as “After the strips are crushed, the fibres are filtered.” This will help you express the sequence more clearly.

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