Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given diagram delineates the manufacturing process of fabric from bamboo.
Overall it is explicitly evident that the bamboo is first planted and than converted in to a fabric which we use in our daily life. The bamboo is first harvested and than cut in strips. After all it is turned in to spin to make it yam, and than it is converted in to a fabric.
Farmers harvest the and cut in to strips. After cutting the bamboo is converted in to strips ands then in to soften fibers. After all it is filtered and then crushed in to strips. After crushing the bamboo is converted in to spin to make it yam After all the bamboos are converted in to weave to make fabric.
However, after all this procedure the fabric get its final touch. The fabric is converted in to different clothes like shirts, shoes etc. All procedure of making fabric from bamboo is mentioned here.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, but the description is repetitive and lacks clarity. While you identify the key steps, the explanation of the process is somewhat confused, particularly in the second paragraph where you repeat steps like 'crushing' and 'strips' multiple times. To improve, you should focus on a logical, linear progression from raw material to finished product without repeating information. The overview is present but could be more detailed by highlighting the transformation from raw bamboo to the final textile product more clearly. The response meets the minimum length requirement, but the content needs better synthesis to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. You use basic cohesive devices like 'After all' and 'then' repeatedly, which makes the writing feel mechanical and repetitive. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and the progression of ideas is hindered by the circular nature of the second paragraph. To improve, try using a wider range of transition signals such as 'subsequently', 'following this', or 'once the process is complete' to guide the reader through the stages more smoothly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the sequence of the manufacturing process.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same words, such as 'converted', 'strips', and 'bamboo', throughout the text. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'turned in to spin to make it yam' (likely meant 'yarn') and 'converted in to weave'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the process. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to manufacturing, such as 'processed', 'extracted', 'spun', or 'woven', and avoid repeating the same basic verbs in every sentence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with prepositions ('in to' instead of 'into'), articles ('the and cut'), and verb forms ('the fabric get its final touch'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic errors limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Incorporating more complex sentence structures, such as passive voice (e.g., 'The bamboo is crushed...'), would also be appropriate for a process description.
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