Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
These diagrams shows that how the fabric is being manufactured from the bamboo. This process is started from Spring season because in Spring the bamboos are planted and than moving to the next step the bamboos are harvested in the Autumn because in this season the bamboos are processed fully and after the production of bamboos are done the bamboos are cut into strips from this the production of fabric from bamboos are processed and after this they soften the fabrics in bamboos by adding water and amine oxide and after this they filtered and separate long fibers from liquid and then moving towards the next step they crust strips of bamboos to make liquid pulp and then in the soften fibers step they make yam by spinning like a ball shape and in the second last step they weave that yam of fibers to make fabrics and through out these steps at the end they make fabric clothes through it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a basic overview of the manufacturing process, but it fails to effectively highlight the main features or stages. The description is presented as a single, long, run-on sentence, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of the process. While the student mentions key stages like planting, harvesting, and processing, the lack of clear structure and the failure to group related steps (e.g., chemical processing vs. mechanical weaving) prevents a clear summary. The response lacks an introductory overview or a clear conclusion, which are essential for a Band 6 or higher. The information is presented in a somewhat repetitive and disjointed manner, missing the opportunity to compare or synthesize the stages effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response suffers significantly from a lack of paragraphing; it is written as a single block of text. Cohesive devices are used in a very repetitive and mechanical way, with 'and after this' or 'and then' appearing repeatedly. This creates a monotonous flow that lacks sophistication. There is no clear logical progression between the stages of the process, and the referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to distinguish between the chemical and mechanical phases of production. The lack of punctuation, particularly full stops, makes the text difficult to parse and negatively impacts the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'bamboos', 'process', and 'make'. There are several instances of inaccurate word choice, such as 'yam' instead of 'yarn' and 'crust' instead of 'crush'. The student attempts to use some technical terms like 'amine oxide', but the surrounding language is too simplistic to demonstrate a wide range. The repetition of the word 'bamboos' throughout the text indicates a lack of lexical variety. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise verbs and nouns related to industrial processes and avoid repeating the same sentence structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammatical range is very limited. The entire response is essentially one long, run-on sentence connected by 'and'. There is a complete lack of punctuation, which is a major error. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of sentence boundaries and the misuse of verb tenses (e.g., 'these diagrams shows') indicate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures. There are no complex sentence structures used effectively. To reach a higher band, the student must learn to use full stops to separate ideas and vary their sentence structure by using subordinate clauses and passive voice, which is appropriate for describing processes.
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