Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram tells us about how a bamboo fabric is manufactured. The first step in it is that we need to plant a bamboo plant in spring. In the second we will wait for autumn, when autumn arrives we will harvest our grown bamboo plant. Then in the third step it would include cutting the plant into strips and then crushing the strips and transforming it into a liquid pulp. After we get the liquid pulp ,we will separate the long fibres from liquid and then we will soften them by adding chemicals such as, amine oxide and H20(water).After we get the soft fibres we will take it to the process of yarning. Then the processed fibres would be spun tightly together to transform them into yarn. After yarning is done we will use the woven machinery to weave it and create a fabric. In the final stage, the fabric is cut and sewn to manufactured finished clothing items that might be skirts, shirts or socks.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from planting to the final product. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the main features, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. The description is purely sequential and lacks analytical comparisons or a synthesis of the process. While the information is accurate, the response reads more like a list of steps rather than a cohesive summary of the diagram. To improve, you should group the stages (e.g., cultivation, processing, and manufacturing) and provide a clear introductory overview highlighting the transformation from raw material to finished goods.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised chronologically, which is appropriate for a process diagram. However, the paragraphing is non-existent; the entire response is a single block of text. Cohesive devices are used, but they are somewhat repetitive (e.g., 'In the second', 'Then in the third', 'After we get'). The flow is mechanical rather than fluid. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect the stages more naturally, and ensure you use paragraph breaks to separate the different phases of the process, such as the cultivation phase versus the industrial processing phase.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on basic verbs like 'get', 'take', and 'make'. While you correctly identify terms like 'liquid pulp' and 'woven machinery', the overall range is limited. There are also some awkward phrasings, such as 'take it to the process of yarning' and 'woven machinery', which are not standard collocations. To improve, focus on using more precise technical vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'extraction', 'refinement', 'spinning', and 'textile production'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For instance, 'The diagram tells us about how a bamboo fabric is manufactured' is slightly unnatural; 'The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing bamboo fabric' would be better. There are also issues with punctuation, such as the space before the comma in 'liquid pulp ,we'. Additionally, the use of 'we' is inappropriate for an academic report, which should be written in the passive voice to maintain an objective tone. Focus on reducing subject-verb agreement errors and improving punctuation consistency.

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