Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Below the diagram illustrates the information or methods about fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Overview, these fabrics are using in our daily life. Furthermore, the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

First of all, we discuss the plant bamboo. These bamboo are completely growing in the season of spring, in this season the plant make new leaves and they more strong.

Next step, in the Autumn, people cut these bamboo, and strong in their farmhouse. And After that, these harvester bamboos cut into strips. Furthermore, crush these strip ( to make liquid pulp), this pulp are using to make clothes. Then, liquid is filter, separate long fibres from liquid.

Moreover, Add water and amine oxide that make it soft fibres. And these fibres spin to make yam. And after completing these steps, weaves to make fabric.

Finally, this fabric are using to make clothes, socks that are used in our daily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview of the manufacturing process, which is a requirement for Task 1. Instead of summarizing the main stages, the text includes irrelevant personal commentary about bamboo growing seasons and farmhouse storage, which is not present in the diagram. The description of the process is fragmented and lacks a logical summary of the transformation from raw material to finished product. The response does not effectively highlight the key stages of the process, such as the chemical treatment or the spinning phase, in a professional or academic manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as starting sentences with 'First of all' or 'Next step' without proper integration into the flow of the text. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly with the use of 'these' and 'this' to refer to nouns that have not been clearly established. The overall structure lacks the logical flow expected in an academic report, making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of the manufacturing process.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There is a reliance on basic, informal language (e.g., 'farmhouse', 'clothes', 'make'). The student struggles with technical terminology related to the process, such as 'yam' instead of 'yarn' and 'filter' instead of 'filtered'. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'these bamboo are completely growing'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the process with any degree of precision or academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this fabric are using', 'these bamboo are'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. The attempt to use more complex structures results in errors that distort the intended meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the overall control of grammar is weak, making the text difficult to read at times.

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