Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The process diagram illustrates how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Overall, it can be seen that, the process consist of two main stages, beginning with plants bamboo spring, and ending with fabric t-shit and shoes.
Intially, plant bamboo spring plant in the farm. Next, harvest autumn is cutting the bamboo and transfer into the machine. Following this, bamboo spring is cutting in the strips machine. After which, the small peace bamboo collect and converted into the crush strips and make to the liquid pulp. Subsequently, bamboo separate the long fibers from liquid and filtered.
In the next stage, soften fibers is adding water and amine oxide converted into tree shape. After that, soften fibers spin to make yarn and refresh the fabric. After which yarn transfer into the weave to make fabric and making the cloths. Finally, these process is very long period time but finally made t-shirt and shoes. It is also very comfortable and soft material.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from raw material to finished product. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the transformation process. While the main features are identified, the explanation of the technical steps (such as the chemical treatment) is imprecise and relies on inaccurate terminology, such as 'tree shape' and 'refresh the fabric'. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on accurately describing the sequence of events and providing a more professional summary of the transformation, avoiding subjective comments like 'it is also very comfortable', which are not relevant to a process description.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Next', 'Following this', and 'Subsequently' to link steps. However, the flow is sometimes interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when describing the transition between the chemical processing and the final product. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one without relying on a repetitive 'After which' structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several instances of incorrect word forms or inappropriate terminology, such as 'bamboo spring' instead of 'bamboo shoots', 'small peace' instead of 'small pieces', and 'crush strips'. The phrase 'making the cloths' is also imprecise in this context. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precise technical vocabulary prevents a higher score. You should focus on learning specific collocations related to manufacturing processes, such as 'raw material', 'chemical processing', and 'industrial machinery'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the process consist', 'these process is'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'soften fibers is adding water'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Reducing these frequent errors is essential for moving into the higher band range.
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