Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given diagram stages of the manufacturing fabric with the help of bamboos.

Overall, it is a mainly 8 step process. The process starts with planting the bamboo tress in spring season. After harvesting of the bamboo and the bamboo passed through various mechanical processes.

To begin with, the initial step of the making bamboo. Firstly, bamboo plants are planted in the winter season. Afterwards, the bamboos are harvested by men. Afterwards, the bamboos are cuts into the strips. The following step is, the strips are crushed and obtain liquid pulp. The fifth step is filtration, in this process liquid pulp separates long fibers.

Furthermore, add water and amine oxide into the long fibers, this process called as soften fibers. After that, these soften fibers are spin and make yam. Lastly, the yams are ready to make weaves and these weaves are used to make fabrics. Finally, jackets and shocks are make with the help of the fabric.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from planting to the final product. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate, as the process is not strictly an '8-step' process based on the diagram provided. Furthermore, the description of the stages is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, professional tone. While the key features are identified, the summary lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band, as it simply lists steps rather than synthesising the information effectively. The inclusion of 'jackets and shocks' (likely a typo for socks) is a good attempt to include the final products, but the overall development is basic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Afterwards' and 'Firstly'. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'The following step is, the strips are crushed'. While the progression of the process is clear, the lack of varied linking words and the somewhat disjointed sentence structure limit the effectiveness of the cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'bamboo tress' (trees), 'make yam' (yarn), and 'shocks' (socks). The student relies on basic verbs like 'make' and 'add' throughout the response. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to use more precise terminology related to manufacturing processes, such as 'processed', 'extracted', 'transformed', or 'converted'. The spelling errors and incorrect word forms significantly impact the precision of the description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the bamboo passed through' (missing auxiliary verb), 'bamboos are cuts' (incorrect verb form), and 'this process called as soften fibers' (missing relative pronoun and incorrect passive construction). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences or missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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