Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

First we buy the seeds of bamboo plant then we put the seed in the box with alot of muds in spring bamboo plant grow and they grow and in autumn we cut the bamboo and send them to the factory in the factory they cut the bamboo into strips then crush the strips to make liquid pulp then they filter because they separate the long fibres from liquid then they add water and oxide make it and spin and make it in a yam then they will clean it package it and send it to the shop alot of people's buy and then they make the weave to make a fiber it's alot of thing to make with them like socks,sweater,caps and other alot of things it is very useful and make it for human that human buy yam and make clothes for them self and that's it .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the process of manufacturing fabric from bamboo, but it fails to adopt an appropriate academic tone. The writing is overly narrative and informal, reading more like a story than a technical report. While the main stages are mentioned, the lack of an overview and the inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary (e.g., 'alot of people's buy') detract from the task requirements. The response lacks the analytical focus required for Task 1, as it fails to group information logically or highlight key features of the manufacturing cycle effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is written as a single, long, run-on paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a complete lack of paragraphing and a severe shortage of cohesive devices. The sentences are linked primarily by 'and' or 'then', creating a repetitive and mechanical flow. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of punctuation makes it challenging for the reader to identify where one stage of the process ends and the next begins. The overall structure is not logical or well-organized.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs like 'make', 'cut', and 'send'. There is no attempt to use technical or precise terminology related to manufacturing processes (e.g., 'extraction', 'processing', 'spinning', 'weaving'). The use of 'alot of' is informal and inappropriate for an academic task. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice, such as 'yam' instead of 'yarn' and 'muds' instead of 'soil' or 'medium', which indicate a limited range of vocabulary for this type of task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There is a total absence of complex sentences or varied grammatical forms. Punctuation is virtually non-existent, with a lack of capital letters and full stops, which makes the text difficult to parse. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'bamboo plant grow') and pluralization (e.g., 'people's buy') are present throughout the text. These errors are frequent and often impede the reader's understanding of the process.

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