Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing of fabric from bamboo.
Overall, this process involves nine stages. One to five stages involve how bamboo plants grow to filter and separate long fabric from liquid. Finally, in six to nine stages, soften the fabric to prepare it for wearing.
In the beginning, bamboo plants are used for the manufacturing of fabrics we plant bamboo plants when they grow the plant harvest and cut into strips crush strips are used to make liquid pulp then these pieces send for filtration where they separate long fabric into liquid.
Moreover, in the sixth stage we have soften fabrics and then add water and amine oxide in the soften fabric, after that we spin to make yarn. However, after completing this process the fabric is ready for making different types of cloths.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the process, the description is somewhat superficial. You have grouped stages 1-5 and 6-9, but the explanation of the actual chemical or mechanical processes (such as the specific role of amine oxide or the transformation of pulp) is underdeveloped. To improve, you should provide a more detailed step-by-step account of the process, ensuring all key features shown in the diagram are clearly explained rather than just listed. The under-length nature of the response prevents a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into three short paragraphs, which is a reasonable structure. However, the logical flow is hindered by the lack of cohesive devices. You use 'Moreover' and 'However' to link ideas, but these are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. For instance, 'However' is used at the end of the process where no contrast is present. The referencing is also weak; phrases like 'these pieces' are vague. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'following this', 'once the process is complete') to guide the reader through the stages more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple verbs like 'make', 'use', and 'send'. There is little attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary related to manufacturing or chemical processes, such as 'extraction', 'dissolving', 'extrusion', or 'synthetic'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and precision in word choice limits the score. To improve, try to incorporate more academic terminology relevant to the process shown in the diagram, such as 'raw material', 'chemical solution', and 'final product', rather than repeating 'fabric' or 'bamboo plants' multiple times.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing articles (e.g., 'we plant bamboo plants when they grow the plant harvest and cut into strips'). The use of 'we' is inappropriate for an academic report, which should be written in the passive voice (e.g., 'bamboo is harvested'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on using the passive voice for process descriptions and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb, avoiding the tendency to string multiple clauses together without proper punctuation.
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