Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram depicts how fabric is obtained from bamboo.
Overall, the process involves several stages ,started with growing bamboo in the fields and ends with making clothes from it.
Commencing with bamboo plants are planted in spring and it take about 3-4 months for proper growth. Moreover, the bamboo are harvested by farmers through using metal sickle. Then the bamboo cut into strips by the machines after that the strips are crushed to make liquid pulp.
The pulp is filtered which separate long fibres from liquid. Furthermore, the fibres are treated with amine oxide and a small amount of water is also added to make it soften. In addition, the fibres are spun into yarn and the yarn is weave into fabric. In the last clothes are made from this.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from cultivation to the final product. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the score. While the overview is present, the description lacks detail in certain areas, such as the specific chemical treatments or the transition between stages. To improve, you should expand on the provided information by describing the process more thoroughly and ensuring the word count meets the minimum requirement. The failure to meet the length constraint prevents a higher score in this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, moving from the initial growth phase to the final production stages. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Commencing with', 'Moreover', 'Then', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the lack of depth in the description makes the overall flow feel somewhat abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, well-developed focus that transitions smoothly into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'harvested', 'sickle', 'liquid pulp', and 'fibres' being appropriate for describing a manufacturing process. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrasings, such as 'make it soften' (should be 'soften it') and 'the yarn is weave' (should be 'woven'). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic verbs. To achieve a higher band, try to incorporate more precise technical vocabulary related to industrial processes and ensure correct word forms are used consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the quality of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'bamboo plants are planted' (bamboo is a mass noun) and 'the bamboo are harvested'. Additionally, there are errors in sentence structure, such as 'it take about 3-4 months' (should be 'takes') and 'in the last clothes are made' (should be 'finally, clothes are made'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent verb tenses throughout your description.
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