Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram displays that how bamboo plays role in the manufacturing of fabric .

Overall, the process involves 9 stages that beginning with planting of bamboo plants and culminates in the production of fabric .

Firstly, In spring season plant a bamboo plant when it grows harvested it in autumn after that cut them into strips with a sharp cutter. .Followed by this crush the strips to convert it into liquid form . Then perform a next important step that involves Filtration to separate the long fibres from liquid mixture.

After this , add water and the amine oxide to soften the fibres . By going through all this process fabric is ready to spin and make a yarn from this and weave it to make fabric and after all these stages fabric is manufactured which involves shirts and socks and many other basic need of humans .

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, the description is somewhat superficial. You mention the stages, but the explanation lacks detail in certain areas, such as the specific chemical or mechanical processes involved. Furthermore, the conclusion regarding the final products (shirts and socks) is slightly inaccurate as the diagram focuses on the manufacturing of the fabric itself rather than the end-user products. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview of each stage and strictly adhere to the word count requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks proper paragraphing, which is essential for a clear structure in an Academic Task 1 response. While there is a basic attempt at logical progression using transition words like 'Firstly', 'Followed by', and 'Then', the flow is hindered by the lack of distinct paragraphs for the introduction, body, and overview. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should organize your response into at least three clear paragraphs: an introduction, a summary of the main features, and a detailed description of the process stages.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'perform a next important step' and 'go through all this process' are somewhat unnatural and lack the precision expected in an academic report. There are also some minor issues with word choice, such as 'basic need of humans', which is not relevant to the technical description of the manufacturing process. To improve, try to incorporate more precise, process-oriented vocabulary such as 'subsequently', 'transformed', 'extracted', and 'processed'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the flow of the text. There are issues with article usage (e.g., 'in spring season'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure (e.g., 'The diagram displays that how bamboo plays role'). Some sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, such as the double periods used in the text. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the frequency of minor errors limit the score. Focus on improving your control over basic sentence construction and punctuation before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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