Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given essay depicts that fabric is made from bamboo.lets analyse this process in following paragraphs. First of all we see that cultivation of bamboo starts in spring season and harvest is completed in Autumn.Then baboo is cut into pieces.then strips are crushed to make liquid .Fibers are separated from this liquid.Tosoften fibers,water and amine oxide is added .Then yams are made by spinning.finally clothes are made by weaving the yam. The detailed picture has been depicted of how clothes are made by different procedures.Different steps are involved in it. Cultivation of bamboo is done in spring season .Now on large scale this cultivation has done to promote this fibre industry.Skill should be introduced to people so that they can earn their livelihood by adopting this. The clothes industry has been flourishing throughout the world.If govt trains people in this industry much progress can be made in it .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the process, the description is quite superficial. You have included irrelevant personal opinions and suggestions about government training and livelihood, which are not required in an Academic Task 1 report. An IELTS report should remain objective and focus solely on the information presented in the diagram. To improve, you must describe the process steps more precisely and avoid adding external commentary or advice.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the process description and the extraneous commentary is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as starting multiple sentences with 'Then' or 'Finally'. Some sentences are fragmented, and the overall progression of ideas is hindered by the inclusion of irrelevant information. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'following this', 'once the process is complete') and ensure each paragraph serves a clear purpose in describing the diagram.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You rely on simple verbs like 'made', 'cut', and 'added'. There are also errors in word formation and spelling, such as 'Tosoften' (to soften) and 'yams' (yarns). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process accurately. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise, topic-specific terminology related to manufacturing, such as 'extraction', 'processing', 'chemical treatment', and 'spinning'. Avoid informal phrasing and focus on using precise nouns and verbs to describe the transformation of the raw material.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is characterized by simple sentence structures and frequent errors in punctuation and capitalization. For example, 'lets analyse' should be 'Let us analyse', and there are missing spaces after periods throughout the text. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits the grammatical range. Frequent errors in article usage (e.g., 'in spring season') and subject-verb agreement are present. To improve, focus on using a mix of simple and complex sentences, ensure proper capitalization and spacing, and proofread carefully to correct basic grammatical slips.

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