Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illustrates how cloth is made from bamboo. The bamboo is plant which is grown in spring season and harvested in autumn it is very hard part because need time to grown and may require proper workers to harvest it with the techniques. After harvesting it is cut into strips through a machine or a cutter which can be heavy . Secondly, the strips need to soften the fibres by adding water and amine oxide then filter the long fibres from the water and amine oxide mixture. Next the strips are crushed to extract the liquid pulp as extraction can be require a lot of effort then the spin for yarn is produced. Then weave the yarn to make its fabric and then fabric is sent to factory for further production of clothes like shirts, jeans, gloves or socks as this the final step to transform bamboo to fabric.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from harvesting to the final product. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the process as a whole. While the key steps are identified, the response relies heavily on listing steps rather than synthesizing the information or highlighting significant features. To improve, ensure you include an introductory sentence that provides a high-level summary of the process and use more precise language to describe the transformation stages, rather than simply narrating the diagram step-by-step. The response is just at the minimum length, so ensure all stages are described with sufficient detail.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is presented as a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of the process. While some cohesive devices like 'Secondly', 'Next', and 'Then' are used, they are somewhat repetitive and mechanical. The lack of paragraphing hinders the overall structure. To reach a higher band, you should organize the information into logical stages—for example, separating the initial harvesting/preparation phase from the chemical processing and final manufacturing phase. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and using them to link ideas more fluidly rather than just listing steps will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'very hard part' and 'proper workers' are imprecise. There is an attempt to use technical terms such as 'amine oxide' and 'liquid pulp', which is positive. However, the range is limited, and there are some awkward collocations, such as 'the spin for yarn is produced'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise verbs and nouns related to industrial processes, such as 'processed', 'converted', 'extracted', or 'subsequently'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied descriptors for the stages of production will help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'The bamboo is plant which is grown' is missing an article, and 'as extraction can be require a lot of effort' contains incorrect verb forms. Additionally, there are several run-on sentences and punctuation issues, such as 'harvested in autumn it is very hard part'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that each sentence has a clear structure. Practicing the use of complex sentences with accurate conjunctions and relative clauses will also help improve your grammatical range.
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