Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given figures illustrates the process how bamboo plant is used to make fabric in different steps. Overall, it can be seen this is a linear cycle which consists of 9 different steps starting form planting of bamboo plants and ending to manufacturing of clothes. In terms of detail,initially,bamboo plant is grown in spring season. secondly,this plant is harvested in autumn season.After harvested, the plant cuts intomany strips.Following this,these strips crushed into pieces to make liquid pulp.subsequently,in filtration process the long fibres separated from liquid.Next,by adding water and amine oxide these fibres became soften.In the next step,these soften fibres spin to made yarn.following the spining process fabric made by weaving process.And then finally,this fabric is used in manufacturing process to made different types of clothes
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, the description is quite brief and lacks the necessary detail to fully develop the response. You have successfully outlined the linear nature of the process, but the lack of length prevents a more thorough analysis of the steps. To improve, ensure you expand on each stage by providing more descriptive detail about the transformations occurring at each point in the diagram, rather than just listing them.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is written as a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. A clear structure with an introduction, a body paragraph for the process, and a concluding summary is essential for IELTS Task 1. While you use some cohesive devices like 'initially', 'secondly', and 'subsequently', the lack of paragraphing and the repetitive sentence structure hinder the flow of information. To improve, organize your ideas into logical paragraphs and vary your transition words to create a more sophisticated progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely on simple verbs like 'make', 'cuts', and 'used'. There are also some minor errors in word formation, such as 'spining' (spinning) and 'soften' (softened). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise, academic vocabulary related to manufacturing processes, such as 'extraction', 'conversion', or 'processed'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repeating the same terms throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms and sentence structure. For example, 'The given figures illustrates' should be 'illustrate', and 'these fibres became soften' should be 'softened'. There are also issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure you use correct verb tenses when describing a process. Practicing complex sentence structures will also help improve your range.
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