Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the process of preparation for fabric which is used to make cloths from bamboo.
Overall, bamboo fabric manufacturing involves 9 different stages. This begins from harvesting of bamboo plants in the season of autumn. Finally, after the yarn of made by spinning it is weaved in materials.
Plantation of bamboo is grown in spring. After the irrigation and weed control the plants are harvested in fall. Later, using advanced machinery which is a wheel like structure with sharp ends, it cut the bamboo into strips. Then, these long strips are crushed; as a result liquid is formed. This liquid which contains pulp and other materials are purified using a conical shaped filter.
The process then goes to next step by adding water and amine oxide which soften the fibres. This fibre must be spined manually to make yarn and then weave
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the process, the description is incomplete. You mention the process ends with weaving, but the diagram includes subsequent steps like 'washing', 'bleaching', and 'dyeing' which are entirely omitted. Furthermore, the summary of the process is somewhat disjointed. To improve, ensure you cover the entire cycle from start to finish and provide a more comprehensive overview of the key features shown in the diagram. The failure to reach the word count and the omission of several key stages significantly limits the development of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the information. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'Finally', and 'Then', the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical. The progression of ideas is interrupted by the abrupt ending of the text. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect the stages of the process more fluidly. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure lacks the cohesion expected at higher bands.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms such as 'harvesting', 'irrigation', 'purified', and 'amine oxide'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'make cloths' (should be 'make cloth' or 'clothing') and 'spined manually' (should be 'spun'). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise technical terms related to manufacturing processes and ensure correct word forms are used.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'after the yarn of made by spinning it is weaved in materials' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Other issues include subject-verb agreement ('this liquid which contains pulp... are purified') and awkward phrasing ('it cut the bamboo'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that passive voice constructions are formed correctly.
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