Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illustrates the process of making fabric from a plant bamboo.
Overall, each stages of fabric manufactured from bamboo describe in this diagram.From first step which is the plantation of the bamboo plant to the last step of this process which is final shape of the clothe like shirt.
The diagram tells the first step of making clothe is plantation of bamboo plant which is happened in spring season and next it is time of harvest in the autumn season.After that cut into strips with cutting machine then crush strips to make liquid pulp.In fifth step filtteration process perform to separate the long fibers from the liquid.in addition to this to get the soft fibers add the water with chemical amine oxide when soft fabric dmade spin and make the yam.
Now the process is about to end and in eight step weaving method is used to make the fabric using the machine .Finally, the final stage of faric is develop.Now clothe is ready to wear and sending in market for sell and get the profit.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from plantation to the final product. However, the overview is weak; it lacks a clear summary of the key stages or the nature of the process. The description is somewhat repetitive and relies on listing steps rather than synthesizing information. While all parts of the diagram are addressed, the lack of a clear, analytical overview and the inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary at the end ('get the profit') prevents a higher score. To improve, focus on grouping the stages logically and providing a more professional summary of the transformation process.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'After that', 'In addition to this', 'Finally'), they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing does not effectively separate the stages of the process. The text lacks a smooth progression of ideas, making it feel like a list of steps rather than a cohesive report. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'step', 'make', and 'process'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'clothe' instead of 'clothing', 'faric' instead of 'fabric', and 'yam' instead of 'yarn'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process with precision. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more specific terminology related to manufacturing (e.g., 'extraction', 'processing', 'textile production') and ensure accurate spelling and word formation throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('each stages... describe'), article usage ('the plantation of the bamboo plant'), and sentence fragments. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some attempts at complex ones that are often faulty (e.g., 'when soft fabric dmade spin and make the yam'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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