Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrates the 9-steps of how to manufacturing the fabric step by step from bamboo.

Overall, the bamboo fabric is processed in a factories by a multiple number of steps and each step in this diagram gives the proper details of bamboo fabric. In the first step, we cultivating the bamboo plants and in the last step making a lot of fabrics like clothes,bags,etc.

In General, first process is cultivating in the spring weather and then harvesting in the weather of Autumn. Now, in the third step, we cut these harvested bamboos into strips and then crush the all strips to make the liquid pulp for separating long fibres from liquid in the filtration process.

In the next step, added the water and amine oxide to makes the soften fibres and spin to make yarn. Second last step, we used weave to make fibre and in the last step the bamboo fabric is made in the manufacturing process.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, but the overview is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear summary of the key features. While the steps are identified, the description of the process is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as stating 'we used weave to make fibre' in the final stages, which misinterprets the diagram. The response would benefit from a more precise description of the transformation from raw material to finished product, rather than simply listing steps. The inclusion of personal pronouns like 'we' is inappropriate for an academic report, which should maintain an objective, impersonal tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'In the first step', 'In the next step', and 'In the last step'. The logical progression is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the transition between the cultivation and the processing stages. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the lack of varied linking words and the somewhat disjointed flow between sentences limit the score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'manufacturing the fabric step by step from bamboo' instead of 'manufacturing bamboo fabric'. Phrases like 'making a lot of fabrics like clothes, bags, etc.' are too informal for an academic task. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'cultivating' used as a noun in the sequence. To improve, you should focus on using more precise technical terminology related to industrial processes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('we cultivating', 'we used weave') and article usage ('in the weather of Autumn'). The sentence construction is often clunky, which impacts the clarity of the process description. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of complex sentence structures and the persistence of basic grammatical errors prevent a higher score. Focusing on consistent verb tenses and avoiding informal personal pronouns will significantly improve the quality of your writing.

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