Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It determines an continuous process how fabric is manufactured from bamboo and how many steps are done to make clothes from fabric.
Nine steps are done to make clothes from bamboo plants and each step holds a specific function in the process.
At first, bamboo plants are grown in spring season, and than the farmers harvest bamboo plant in Autumn season. After harvesting bamboo plant they cut strips of bamboo by using a cutter, and in the next step those strips are crushed to make liquid pulp through it, and than through filter duct long fibers are separated from liquid pulp. After separating fibers they add water and amine oxide to soften fibers, and than make yam through it by spinning it into round, and weave to make fabrics, and after the whole procedure they make clothes through the fabrics they produced through from the strips of the bamboo strips.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the bamboo manufacturing process, from harvesting to the final product. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the key trends or stages. While it identifies the nine steps, the explanation of the technical processes is overly simplistic and relies heavily on listing rather than synthesizing the information. To improve, you should group the stages logically (e.g., cultivation, processing, and manufacturing) and provide a more analytical summary of the transformation from raw plant to finished fabric, rather than just listing the steps sequentially.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. You rely heavily on simple transition words like 'at first', 'in the next step', and 'after', which makes the flow feel repetitive. There is a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices to link the stages of the process more fluidly. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'through it', which is used multiple times to refer to different objects, causing confusion for the reader. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring clear pronoun references would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You use the word 'bamboo' and 'strips' multiple times, which limits the lexical range. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'make yam' (likely meant 'yarn') and 'filter duct', which are not the most precise terms for this industrial process. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific technical vocabulary related to manufacturing, such as 'extraction', 'chemical treatment', 'spinning', and 'weaving', while avoiding the repetition of the same nouns throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'It determines an continuous process' is grammatically incorrect, and there are issues with article usage ('in spring season') and prepositional phrases. The sentence structure is often run-on, particularly in the final paragraph, where multiple clauses are joined by 'and' repeatedly. To improve, focus on using more varied sentence structures, such as passive voice (which is essential for process descriptions) and subordinating conjunctions, while paying closer attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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