Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The map illustrates how fabric is manufactured from bamboo, However it was not repeating steps, it can involves nine major stages to make fabric, it begin with Plant and to finish with weave.
the bamboo fabric is made begin with planting bamboo plants in spring season then after it growth long Harvest Autumn transform into cut into smaller with a meachine strips then crush strips it gives to make liquid pulp the liquid can be filter it can separate fresh liquid, separate long fibres from liquid then slowly Soften fibres slowly add water and amine oxide after that spin to make yam after 2 to 3 days ulitimately weave to make fabric by that make any t-shirts as well as socks to wear clothes However it will be shipped into shopping malls or any stores besides the main road people can buy in low cost.
bamboo fabric is made by human work the fabric comes from plants it is some difficult to make fabric.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to describe the nine-stage diagram of how bamboo fabric is made, beginning with planting and ending with weaving and end products. However, the response fails to meet the basic requirements of an effective Academic Task 1 summary. Instead of providing a clear overview and logically reporting the main features, the text is a fragmented and confusing narration of the process. Important stages are poorly described or mixed together, such as the transition from crushing strips to liquid pulp and adding amine oxide. The text also includes irrelevant external assumptions not found in the diagram, such as shipping items to shopping malls by the main road and buying them at a low cost. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and a clear overarching structure. Instead of using standard paragraphing to group stages logically, the text is broken into three disjointed blocks of text, including a single-sentence concluding paragraph. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on repetitive conjunctions like 'and' or poorly placed transition words like 'However' and 'ulitimately'. Sentences run into one another without proper punctuation or transitions, making the progression of the manufacturing process extremely difficult to follow. There is no clear flow from introduction to body to conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct lifting or awkward paraphrasing of words from the prompt, such as 'bamboo plants', 'harvest', 'strips', 'liquid pulp', and 'weave'. There are severe limitations in lexical choice, resulting in unnatural phrases like 'cut into smaller with a meachine strips' and 'spin to make yam' (instead of yarn). Word formation and spelling errors are frequent throughout the response, such as 'meachine' and 'ulitimately', which impede communication and strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The response consists mostly of poorly constructed run-on sentences and major sentence boundary errors (e.g., comma splices and missing periods), such as 'the bamboo fabric is made begin with planting bamboo plants in spring season then after it growth long Harvest Autumn transform into cut into smaller...'. There is an almost complete absence of accurate complex structures, and basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are frequently violated. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, severely hindering readability.
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