Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Map Illustrate the all staages of how bamboo Fabic is created.

As we all know that the Bamboo fabic is naturally made from the Bamboo plants. The farming of bamboo plants starts in the early Spring and growing in the last of the Autumn, So mainly Bamboo Plants harvest in Autumns after that the process of making bmaboo cloths /fabric is starts.

For the first bamboo cuts into the strips then crushes the strips into the liquid pulp. The Liquid Pulp going from the lfilterization process which is filtered the long fibres from the liquid so that the fibre is soften by adding the water and amine oxide.

Futhermore, from the soft fabric they made the spin for the yam so that they creates Weave and starts making cloths like T-shirts, shocks and etc.

Overoll, the they repeated whole process again and again to creats fabrics and cloths form the bamboo plants in large amount.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the process of making bamboo fabric, covering the general sequence from planting to finished clothing items like T-shirts and socks. However, there are significant omissions and misunderstandings of the visual data. For instance, the text claims that 'the farming of bamboo plants starts in the early Spring and growing in the last of the Autumn', whereas the diagram simply indicates planting in spring and harvesting in autumn. Furthermore, the intermediate chemical stages involving filtering, softening with water and amine oxide, spinning, and weaving are described in a confused and disjointed manner ('from the soft fabric they made the spin for the yam so that they creates Weave'). While the main stages are touched upon, the lack of clarity and mechanical reporting places this performance at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response shows an attempt at organization by breaking information into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'As we all know that' and 'Futhermore, from the soft fabric they made...'. The referencing is unclear throughout, making it difficult to follow the precise sequence of steps in the manufacturing process. Paragraphing is rudimentary and does not effectively guide the reader through the distinct phases of the diagram. The overall arrangement is disjointed, resulting in a Band 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a precise technical process description. There are numerous spelling errors ('Fabic', 'staages', 'bmaboo', 'lfilterization', 'Futhermore', 'yam', 'creates', 'form', 'Overoll', 'shocks'), incorrect word forms ('growing' instead of 'grow', 'cuts' instead of 'is cut'), and inappropriate word choices ('shocks' instead of 'socks'). While the writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'liquid pulp', 'fibres', and 'fabric', the high density of lexical and orthographic errors significantly impedes clarity, reflecting a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at more complex constructions are consistently marred by severe errors, such as 'For the first bamboo cuts into the strips then crushes the strips' (passive/active confusion and missing subjects) and 'the they repeated whole process again and again to creats fabrics'. Punctuation and capitalization errors are widespread. Errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader, placing this criterion at Band 4.0.

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