Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In the diagram show that how to fabric is manufactured from bamboo, that show how to make a fabric after many process. Fabric is used everyone in daliy life but some people know how to make a good fabric? In this passage i try to explain it.
The process start with a planting of bamboos, Harvest it and many other process make a fabric than the fabric is used to make a cloths and other things.
The first step is that plant bamboos in cattle and wait for it growth. When the bamboos whare ready. Now start second step, the second step is that harvest the bamboos and load it into truck and send it to factorys to start other process. The third step is that cut into strips and crush strips to dry liquid than it to fiter for every one strip are be separates long fibers from liquid . After that fiber is to soft and add water , amine oxide or other chemicals.Than it spin to make a roll and it load into the machine . The machine make a fabric than it fabric is used to make a cloths or other things .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover the main steps shown in the diagram, ranging from planting and harvesting bamboo to cutting, crushing, filtering, softening, spinning, and weaving into final products like clothes. However, the summary lacks a clear and cohesive overview of the overall process. Furthermore, the inclusion of conversational and rhetorical questions in the introduction ('Fabric is used everyone in daliy life but some people know how to make a good fabric? In this passage i try to explain it.') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response, as it violates the formal tone required. While most stages of the linear process are mentioned, the explanation of individual steps is occasionally confused or lacks precise reporting of the visual data. These limitations place the task achievement in the lower-middle band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response suffers from significant structural and cohesive issues. The introduction contains irrelevant conversational remarks and a personal statement rather than an objective summary. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with a very brief, disjointed second paragraph and a dense, messy final paragraph that clumps multiple distinct stages together. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused (e.g., repeating 'The third step is that... Than it spin...'). There is no clear, logical progression guiding the reader smoothly from one stage of the diagram to the next, resulting in a choppy and disjointed overall arrangement.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on everyday conversational language rather than precise process-related terminology. The student correctly employs some terms from the prompt such as 'bamboos', 'strips', 'fibers', and 'fabric', but struggles with word choice and collocation (e.g., writing 'dry liquid' instead of liquid pulp, 'fiter' instead of filter, and 'to soft' instead of soften). There are also numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'daliy', 'factorys', 'fiter', 'Than' (used for then), and 'cloths'. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for expressing the technical details of the manufacturing process effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, characterized by a high frequency of basic errors that frequently impede communication. The response opens with a severely malformed fragment: 'In the diagram show that how to fabric is manufactured from bamboo, that show how to make a fabric after many process.' There are pervasive errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the process start', 'bamboos whare ready'), tense consistency, article usage, and prepositions. Sentence structures are predominantly simple or attempted complex sentences that break down grammatically (e.g., 'The third step is that cut into strips and crush strips to dry liquid than it to fiter for every one strip are be separates long fibers from liquid'). Punctuation is also problematic.
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