Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The linear diagram elucidates the how clothes are prepared from bombo.HOWEVER, There are total nine steps in this diagram.
In an overview , The fabric is made form bombo the plants grow up in spring additionaly in autum the man are cutting the tree . Man cut the tree into small pieces with machiene . FURTHERMORE,they crush the tree to make with liquid pulp. The small pieces of tree deliverd into the filter machine seprate long fibres from liquid . AS WELL AS , soften fibrea add water and amine oxide .
MOREOVER, soften fibers go to spin to make a yam . AT LEAST BUT NOT LAST , The spin go to the weave they creat a new shape and to make a fabrics . AT THE END OF fabrics delivered many factories and they delivered a new shapes and many good variety of items prepared and they make a shirts and socks etc.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the diagram illustrating the process of manufacturing bamboo fabric, correctly identifying that there are nine sequential steps. However, the summary suffers from significant issues with accuracy and completeness. While the student mentions several stages such as planting, harvesting, cutting into strips, crushing, filtering, softening, spinning, and weaving, the reporting is frequently disjointed, incomplete, and misses crucial contextual links shown in the visual data (such as the specific use of amine oxide or the transition of materials). Furthermore, spelling errors such as "bombo" and "autum" obscure some details. The overview is weak and lacks a comprehensive summary of the main stages from raw material to finished product. Therefore, this performance corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The logical progression of the text is severely hindered by erratic paragraphing, inappropriate use of uppercase conjunctions like "HOWEVER", "FURTHERMORE", and "AS WELL AS", and poor mechanical cohesion. The text is divided into awkward, short paragraphs that do not logically group the stages of the manufacturing process. Reference words and logical connectors are frequently misused or overly repetitive, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the process. While there is a basic chronological attempt to move from planting to final products, the overall organisational structure is faulty and lacks clear cohesive progression, placing it firmly at Band 4.5, which rounds to a Band 5.0 descriptor profile for basic progression with inadequate cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Lexical range is very limited and heavily impacted by numerous spelling and word-choice errors. The student repeatedly misspells "bamboo" as "bombo", and fails to use appropriate vocabulary for process descriptions, relying on basic terms such as "cut the tree", "make with liquid pulp", and "new shape". Vocabulary items like "yam" instead of "yarn" and "fibrea" instead of "fibres" demonstrate a lack of precision. Although some process-related words like "filter", "soften", "spin", and "weave" are attempted, the severe spelling and collocation errors restrict the lexical score to Band 4.0, as the vocabulary strains the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The student relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex constructions are frequently faulty, such as in "the plants grow up in spring additionaly in autum the man are cutting the tree". There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement (e.g., "the man are cutting", "soften fibers go"), missing articles, and punctuation. Punctuation is particularly erratic with misplaced capitalization and unnecessary spacing. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect a grammar profile characteristic of Band 4.0.
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