Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given picture illustrate,how fabric is created from bamboo.
Overall,there are nine stages of this process. it start with Plant bamboo,and end with clothes. firstly, The plant bamboo has been grown up,after that bamboo is collecting by harvest.then it cutted into strip.After that it goes in next process,in the next process bamboo have been crushed and to make liquid pulp.then it will be filter.After that it made into a soft fibres then it made into yarn.After that it convert into fabric it has ready to made.lastly it made into clothes.
Overall,it is a bamboo manufactural process,it show how fabric are made'd in a factory,further more, it made into clothes wich provides for everyone.It is a long process but there features are actually quit natural.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response covers the main steps of the bamboo manufacturing process, from planting to the final clothes, and attempts to report the sequence. However, the length requirement of 150 words is not met, as the response contains only 124 words, leading to under-development of the overview and supporting details. Furthermore, the selection of features lacks academic precision, and the description relies heavily on fragmented sentences rather than a fully developed summary. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to expand the response past the minimum word count and provide a more comprehensive, cohesive overview of all nine sequential steps.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts to organise the process chronologically using basic transitional markers such as "firstly", "after that", and "lastly". However, paragraphing is poorly managed, with almost the entire body compressed into a single, run-on block of text following the introduction. Cohesive devices are repetitive and sometimes mechanically applied (e.g., repeating "after that" multiple times consecutively). Referencing is also unclear in places, such as "it goes in next process". This lack of structured paragraphing and varied cohesive language restricts the text to a Band 5 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive (e.g., using "made into" and "process" multiple times). There are noticeable word-formation and word-choice errors, such as "picture illustrate", "plant bamboo has been grown up", "collecting by harvest", and "cutted into strip". Uncommon lexical items related to manufacturing processes are absent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the limited range and frequent inaccuracies in word choice and spelling place this criterion firmly at Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are largely simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent errors in verb forms, voice, and subject-verb agreement, such as "fabric are made'd", "bamboo is collecting", and "it has ready to made". Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and run-on sentences. While some basic structures are correct, the frequency of grammatical errors causes noticeable difficulty for the reader and prevents the writing from reaching Band 5.0.
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