Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given diagram represents the process of producing bamboo from fabric, whole process is under nine steps. Firstly, it starts from bamboo plants grown in spring, thenafter, in autum it is cutting.

Upcoming third step bamboo is given shape in strips from machine blade, moreover, these strips are crushed for liquid pulp. Fifth step is showed filtering out the long fibers from liquid, however, the fibers are now get into soft by adding water and amine oxide. A drastic change in seen in seventh position of this process fibers are now tightly spin t make yam.

On the other hand, yam is weave to make fabric and in last t shirt and socks are made from this fabric which are comfortable also can be used in winter.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe the process of making bamboo fabric, noting key steps such as planting, harvesting, crushing, filtering, spinning, and weaving. However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 127 words, which incurs a clear penalty under Task Achievement. Furthermore, several descriptions are inaccurate or confused; for instance, the writer states the process 'represents the process of producing bamboo from fabric' instead of fabric from bamboo. While some main stages are mentioned, the lack of a proper overview and the incomplete development mean the response only partially addresses the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is divided into three short paragraphs, which roughly correspond to the stages of the diagram. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward sequencing and poor cohesive devices. Phrases like 'Upcoming third step' and 'A drastic change in seen in seventh position' sound unnatural and mechanical. Referencing is often unclear, such as in the sentence 'yam is weave to make fabric and in last t shirt and socks are made from this fabric which are comfortable also can be used in winter', where sentence boundaries and transitions break down.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and contains numerous lexical errors and inappropriate word choices. Examples include 'autum it is cutting' instead of 'harvesting', 'yam' instead of 'yarn', and 'weave' instead of 'woven'. The writer attempts some less common terms like 'amine oxide' and 'liquid pulp', but these are overshadowed by frequent word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding and reflect a very limited control of lexical features.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, with frequent errors in tense, voice, and word form. Examples of errors include 'whole process is under nine steps', 'fibers are now get into soft', and 'yarn is weave'. Sentence structures are largely restricted to simple or poorly attempted complex forms, and passive voice structures necessary for process descriptions are mishandled (e.g., 'Fifth step is showed filtering out' instead of 'is shown'). These persistent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader.

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