Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given process diagram illustrates the information How bamboo fabric are made.
After analysis,it is clear that there are 9 step in the production of bamboo fabric, The cycle begins with bamboo plants spring end with to make fabric. This is achieved by turning bamboo plants into soft fabrics.
The process commence with spring the bamboo plant,harvested in autumn when they are ready.The harvested bamboo then cut into strips. Which are subsequently crushed to make liquid pulp.In the next stage,liquid pulp filtered through long fibers from liquid.
Following this,the febric are soften by adding water and amine oxide, Afterwords , they are spin to make yarn.Through this the yarn to move into weave to make febric.Finally, the finished fabric ready for marketing .
these are 9 process cycle to depict the process how cloth are make with the help of bamboo plant and how is the proccesing bamboo plant into soft fabric
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the process of manufacturing bamboo fabric, correctly identifying key stages such as planting, harvesting, crushing, and spinning. However, the task achievement is hindered by inaccuracies and omissions in tracing the sequence of steps. For instance, the student states that the liquid pulp is 'filtered through long fibers from liquid', which misinterprets the diagram's step of separating long fibres from liquid. Furthermore, the final steps and the overview suffer from severe repetition and confusing phrasing, such as 'these are 9 process cycle to depict the process how cloth are make'. While the main idea of the process is captured, the progression and specific details lack clarity, aligning the response with a Band 5 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is divided into several short paragraphs, but the overall logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'After analysis, it is clear' as an inappropriate introductory frame, and 'Afterwords , they are spin' which contains poor punctuation and referencing. The sequencing of the process is difficult to follow at times due to abrupt transitions, and the repetitive concluding sentences disrupt the flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is faulty, making it challenging for the reader to follow the logical development of the steps.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and spelling errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples of errors include 'febric' (fabric), 'spring' used as a verb ('spring the bamboo plant'), 'Afterwords', and 'spin' instead of 'spun'. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'harvested', 'strips', 'liquid pulp', and 'yarn', the heavy reliance on incorrect forms of words and repetitive phrasing restricts the lexical range to a lower band level. More precise control over word formation and spelling is needed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex or passive constructions are consistently faulty. Examples include 'How bamboo fabric are made' (subject-verb agreement error), 'The process commence with' (missing third-person 's'), 'The harvested bamboo then cut into strips' (missing auxiliary verb), and 'the febric are soften'. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces before commas and full stops. Errors are extremely frequent throughout the response, often causing difficulty for the reader and restricting the grammar score.
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