Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In spring season the plant of bamboo grow's and in autumn the harvesting of bamboo starts after harvesting cut the bamboo's into strips than crush the strips to make it in liquid pulp after that filter that pulp for seprate long fibres from liquid, the next step is add water and amine oxide in the seprately liquid to soften fibre after this process spin this soften fibre to make yarn and than from this yarn doing weave to make fabric, the final process is weave with yarn to make fabric and your fabric is ready to wear. You can make shirts, socks, sweater even pants as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response covers the main stages of the process, moving from planting and harvesting to cutting, crushing, filtering, softening, spinning, and weaving. However, the length requirement of at least 150 words has not been met, as the student's text contains only 107 words. This under-length impacts the overall development and completeness of the task. Additionally, while the steps are mentioned in sequence, the description lacks an introductory overview of the process and fails to fully report all key features shown in the diagram, such as the final clothing items depicted in step 9, leading to a partial fulfillment of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is written as a single, continuous run-on sentence without proper punctuation or paragraph breaks. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive, relying heavily on words like "then" and "after that" to link clauses. There is a lack of clear sentence boundaries, which makes the progression difficult to follow and results in poor overall cohesion. Paragraphing is entirely absent, further lowering the score for this criterion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with direct lifting of terms from the prompt such as "plant bamboo", "harvest", "strips", "liquid pulp", and "fabric". There are noticeable word-form and word-choice errors, such as "grow's" instead of "grow", "seprate" instead of "separate", and "seprately liquid" instead of "separated liquid". The lexical range is limited and barely adequate for describing a process, resulting in language that often strains the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The entire response consists of one long, poorly punctuated sentence joined by comma splices and conjunctions. There is a very limited range of grammatical structures attempted, and control over basic grammar is weak. Examples of errors include subject-verb agreement issues ("the plant of bamboo grow's"), incorrect verb forms ("doing weave"), and missing articles. Frequent errors throughout the text impede readability and demonstrate poor control over basic sentence construction.

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