Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
this diagram shows how fabric is m anufactured by bamboo. infact this illustrated the main prosess of utilizing the bamboo into fabric. The posseger of fabrics required eight steps to get the main result .here i discuss the main method ,firstly the growing proses start in spring ,n on the other hand in autumn its harvesting ,then the bamboo cut into strips ,after crushing it they get the liquid form of it. getting liquid the strips seprate from liquid .when liquid seems clear they add water and amine oxide to make it smooth ,now its finally going to turn into yarn .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 102 words compared to the required 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts task completion. While the student attempts to describe the main steps of the bamboo fabric manufacturing process, such as planting, harvesting, cutting into strips, and adding water and amine oxide, the information is incomplete and stops short of covering all nine stages shown in the diagram. Additionally, there are inaccuracies in reporting the sequence and details of the process. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text suffers from poor structural organisation and a lack of proper paragraphing, being presented largely as a single run-on block of text. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as "infact" and "n on the other hand", which fails to create a clear logical progression through the process steps. Referencing is sometimes confusing, and the overall flow is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of manufacturing smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as "prosess" for process, "posseger" for passage/process, and "seprate" for separate. There is a very limited range of lexical items appropriate for an academic process description, and awkward phrasing such as "utilizing the bamboo into fabric" demonstrates a lack of control over standard collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple and poorly controlled compound sentences. Punctuation and capitalization are frequently misused (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters like "infact this" and "n on the other hand"). Run-on sentences and comma splices are prevalent, and grammatical inaccuracies frequently impede readability.
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