Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
this picture shows the procedure of manufacturing clothes fabric through bamboo. this all procedure named as bamboo fabric manufacturing. it has 9 steps to make clothes thorough bamboo plants. first we plant bamboo plants in spring after some time when it harvest in autumn we can use this bamboo and after this we can cut these bamboos into stripes through cutter machine. then crush this stripes to make liquid pulp then filter this pulp the procedure that separates fibers from liquid and then it makes soften fibers by adding water and amine oxide. then make its yam by spinning. then weaving this yam thread that are made by bamboo in last step we can make all type of clothes by using bamboo fabric.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the nine-step diagram illustrating the process of manufacturing fabric from bamboo, identifying key stages such as planting, harvesting, cutting, crushing, and weaving. However, the candidate fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 123 words. Consequently, the development of the response is limited, and certain details are treated superficially. While the overall process is outlined in chronological order, the brevity prevents a fully comprehensive account of the manufacturing cycle, leading to a penalty under Task Achievement for failing to reach the word count threshold.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text lacks any paragraphing, being presented as a single, dense block of text, which significantly hinders readability and logical structure. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, relying heavily on consecutive uses of 'then' and 'after this' to link the stages of the process. There is a lack of advanced transition markers or logical connectors that would guide the reader smoothly through the multi-stage diagram. Although a chronological sequence is maintained, the overall cohesive framework is mechanical and inadequate, reflecting Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent reliance on everyday words such as 'make', 'clothes', 'bamboo', and 'strips'. There are multiple vocabulary and lexical errors, such as 'stripes' instead of 'strips', 'yam' instead of 'yarn', and awkward phrasing like 'clothes fabric'. Attempts to use technical terms from the prompt, such as 'amine oxide', are visible, but control over word choice and collocation is weak. The limited range and recurring inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response consists almost entirely of simple and poorly controlled compound sentences connected by conjunctions. There is a complete lack of punctuation, with no capital letters at the beginning of sentences and no periods separating thoughts, creating run-on sentence structures. Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense inconsistencies and subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'when it harvest' instead of 'when it is harvested'. The frequent structural errors and absence of punctuation cause considerable strain for the reader.
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