Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart illustrates about proportion of library members of several ages(children, young and Adults) .The bar chart compares number of loans in between year 2007 and 2016
Overall, it is clear that Adults accounted for largest share while rest of categories recorded the smallest.The table provides information about loans by category in which Children's fiction and Adult fiction recorded the highest while Children's DVDs had the lowest.
Looking first at pie chart the Adults between age 18-64 accounted for 51% of the total while Adults greater than or equals to 65 represented 12%.Children made upto 22% and young adults accounted for 15%.
Regarding the remaining categories the Children's fiction and Adult fiction represented the equal share of 38% loans whereas Children's DVDs recorded the lowest share of 1%.Finally, the number of loans increased from approximately 16,000 in 2007 to around 21,500 in 2016. Although there were some fluctuations, the overall trend was upward, with the figure reaching a peak in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 1.0
The candidate has completely misunderstood the prompt. The prompt asks to describe a process diagram showing how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. However, the student's response describes pie charts, bar charts, and loans, which belong to a completely different task (likely a Cambridge practice test about library membership and book loans). Because the student has written about data that is not present in the prompt's diagram, this response fails to address the requirements of the Task 1 diagram. Consequently, the task achievement score is heavily penalised for being off-topic.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Despite being off-topic regarding the content, the text displays a basic structure typical of an IELTS response, featuring introductory remarks and logical transitions like 'Looking first at pie chart' and 'Regarding the remaining categories'. Paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, with abrupt shifts between topics (pie chart to loans), reflecting the confused nature of the content. Cohesive devices are used mechanically ('Finally', 'Although'), but referencing is poor due to the mismatch with the visual data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relevant to chart and data description ('proportion', 'accounted for', 'fluctuations', 'overall trend', 'peak'). Words such as 'proportion', 'share', and 'fluctuations' demonstrate an adequate range for task 1 writing, although they are completely misapplied to a process diagram prompt. There are minor formatting issues, such as missing spaces before parentheses, but the vocabulary itself is generally intelligible.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Although there were some fluctuations, the overall trend was upward...'. However, there are notable grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, including missing articles ('illustrates about proportion', 'accounted for largest share'), incorrect preposition use, and punctuation errors around parentheses. Despite these errors, the grammatical structures themselves are varied enough to show some control.
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