Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram show that fabrics made by bamboos. Firstly former people grow cane in the spring season. When as soon as bamboo crop has ripenend then they start the harvest in autums season. After all this, the bamboo peaces cut into strips.
Secondly, the liquid separate who store into bamboos by filters. Then bamboos crush into soft cotton as well as add water and amnie oxide or other useful chemicals. After all this process, the cotton clean with water and then machines made yarn from this cotton which help to made garments and clothes.
At the last, it is woven by yarn for making cloth then this is use to make all type of clothes and other kind of things that we wears in different weathers. According to weather factories make clothes foe survivals all human beings. After this process the clorthes ready for going into markets by huge trucks or containers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the nine-step process of manufacturing fabric from bamboo shown in the diagram. While the writer covers the general sequence from planting to making garments, the information is presented with significant confusion and inaccuracies regarding the stages. For instance, the text claims that bamboo pieces are cut into strips and then liquid is separated using filters, misinterpreting the actual progression of crushing strips into pulp before filtering. Furthermore, irrelevant external commentary is introduced, such as 'factories make clothes foe survivals all human beings' and transporting clothes in 'huge trucks or containers,' which are not supported by the diagram. There is no clear overall overview provided. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with Band 5 criteria due to under-developed and inaccurate reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into three paragraphs, mirroring the physical structure of the source diagram, but the logical progression and internal cohesion are weak. The writer attempts to sequence the steps using transition words like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'At the last,' but these are insufficient to create a smooth flow because the sentences within paragraphs lack logical connection. Reference words are frequently unclear, such as 'it is woven by yarn' or 'then this is use,' making it difficult to track what the pronouns refer to. Paragraphing is attempted, but overall cohesion is mechanical and faulty, placing it securely in Band 4.5 to 5.0. Band 5 is awarded as there is some basic organization present.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and often strained by severe word-choice and spelling errors. Examples include 'bamboos' instead of bamboo plants, 'ripenend' instead of ripe, 'peaces' instead of pieces, 'amnie oxide' instead of amine oxide, and 'clorthes' instead of clothes. While the writer attempts some process-specific terms like 'strips,' 'liquid,' and 'yarn,' the frequent lexical inaccuracies and inappropriate vocabulary choices impede communication significantly. The range is limited and minimally adequate for attempting the task, matching the descriptors for Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are persistent errors in basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions throughout the text, such as 'The diagram show that fabrics made by bamboos,' 'When as soon as bamboo crop has ripenend then they start,' and 'the liquid separate who store into bamboos.' Punctuation is also erratic. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and prevent the formation of error-free sentences, corresponding to a Band 4 level.
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