Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram give information and shows that how fabric is manufactured from bamboo plant.
Overall, the diagram has nine stages which are showing that how a fabric manufactured from bamboo plants. In the first, the farmer spread the seeds in the field after some time later a plants grow which called bamboo plant, when he grow up people harvest it and it goes into industries and manufactured cloths.
The table shows that bamboo plant grow up in the spring and a farmer is harvest it in autumn, and goes into industries and cut into strips after that crush strips make liquid pulp however the liquid filter and made soften fibres.
After that soften fibres spin and make yarn and it goes to another stage and weave make plain fabric, after that plain fabric converted in cloths and make socks shirts and jeans and another things .
In conclusion, a plants can make different type cloths and other things .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main stages of the process, moving from planting bamboo in spring to harvesting in autumn, cutting into strips, making liquid pulp, filtering, softening fibres, spinning into yarn, and finally weaving into fabric and manufacturing clothes. However, there are notable inaccuracies and omissions in reporting the sequence and details. For example, the student writes 'the farmer spread the seeds in the field', whereas the diagram clearly shows planting bamboo plants in spring, not seeds. Additionally, the description compresses multiple distinct steps together rather than presenting a clear, structured overview of the entire nine-step manufacturing process. While the general topic is addressed, the development of ideas is limited, leading to a score in the lower-middle range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall progression lacks smooth logical flow and structure. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, such as 'after that', 'in the first', and 'and it goes to another stage'. There are also run-on sentences and punctuation issues, such as missing full stops and commas, which make the text feel disjointed. For instance, the sentence starting with 'The table shows that...' combines multiple steps with excessive use of coordinating conjunctions ('and... and... after that... however... and...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is somewhat haphazard, hindering clear progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('clothes', 'things', 'plant', 'fabric'). There are several inappropriate word choices and non-standard collocations, such as 'spread the seeds' instead of planting, 'industries' used as a verb phrase destination ('goes into industries'), and 'made soften fibres' instead of softening fibres. Less common lexical items are attempted ('manufactured', 'liquid pulp', 'soften fibres'), but they are often grammatically mismanaged. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the limited range and lack of precision restrict the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound sentences often result in major errors, such as 'when he grow up people harvest it and it goes into industries and manufactured cloths' (tense shifts, missing articles, passive voice errors). Subject-verb agreement issues are frequent, such as 'a plants can make' and 'a plants grow'. Punctuation is weak, with sentences frequently run together without proper terminal punctuation. These numerous foundational errors frequently impede clear communication.
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