Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given diagram illustrate the information about the fabric manufacted by bamboo.
overal, it can be clearly seen that; the process consist of nine stages which are : plant bamboo,harvest,cut into strips, crush strips, filter, soften fibres, spin and
wave.
The very firts stage of the making fibre from the bambbo is plantinf of bammboo plan and thn harvestings after taht cutting it into strips . moreover,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response only minimally addresses the task and falls well short of the minimum 150-word requirement, stopping abruptly at 67 words. While the writer attempts to summarise the diagram by mentioning several stages such as planting bamboo, harvesting, cutting into strips, crushing, filtering, softening, spinning, and weaving, the information is incomplete and heavily truncated. There is no fully developed overview or detailed comparison of the process's overall structure, resulting in an inadequate account of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text presents some organisation with an attempt at an overview and a sequential listing of steps, but there is no clear overall progression due to the incomplete nature of the writing. Basic linking words are used, such as 'overal', 'moreover', and 'then', but referencing and transitions between ideas are faulty and mechanical. Furthermore, the response fails to use proper paragraphing, presenting a disjointed set of fragments rather than a cohesive report.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several noticeable spelling and word-form errors that strain the reader, such as 'manufacted' instead of 'manufactured', 'overal' instead of 'overall', 'firts' instead of 'first', 'bammboo' instead of 'bamboo', and 'plantinf' instead of 'planting'. The range of vocabulary is limited to direct lifting of terms from the prompt, showing very little flexibility or control over less common lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting of very simple sentence structures and incomplete clauses, such as 'The very firts stage of the making fibre from the bambbo is plantinf of bammboo plan and thn harvestings after taht cutting it into strips.' There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, prepositions, and punctuation, including missing full stops and incorrect capitalization, which reflect a poor control of basic grammatical structures.
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