Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE TOPIC IS HOW TO MANUFACTURE FABRIC FROM THE BAMBOO.FIRST OVERALL THE CUTT THE BAMBOO TREE AND THEN WE HAVEREST AND CLEAN THE TREE AND AFTER THIS CUTT THE BAMBOO TREE IN THE STRIPS AND LATER THEN CRUSH THE BAMBOO STRIPS TO GIVE HIM LIQUID FORM. WHEN THIS CAME LIQUID FORM WE DIFFR\ERENT THE LONG FIBER FROM THE LIQUID TO MAKE HIM NATURALL ANDF NOT HARMFULL. AFTER THAT PROCESS WE ADD SOME WAATER IN THIS AND AMINE OXIDE FOR MAKE THIS SOFT AFTER THAT LONG PROCESS WE SPIN INTO A THREAD TO MAKE IN YAMM AND AFTER SOME TIMES WEAVE TO MAKE FABRIC TO MAKE SOFTNESS. THEN THE BAMBOO TREE IS READY TO MAKING OUR CLOTHES AFTER OVERALL THE PROCESS. THE PROCCESS IS SEEING EASY BUT NIOT IN REAILTY. THE PROCESS TAKES MANY TIME TO COMPLETE FORM. THERE IS THE SIMPLE EXPLAINATION OFV THR BAMBOO TREE TO MANUFACTURE A FIBRE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the overall subject and report several central stages, including cutting the bamboo into strips, crushing it into liquid pulp, separating fibres, adding water and amine oxide, spinning yarn, and weaving fabric. This gives the reader a partial account of the process. However, important details are omitted or inaccurately added: the diagram begins with planting in spring and harvesting in autumn, while your opening says the bamboo is cut, rested, and cleaned. You also do not clearly report the final stage, where the fabric is made into clothing. Claims that the fibres are made “naturall and not harmfull,” that weaving creates softness, and that the process takes a long time are not shown. A more complete, factual overview and accurate coverage of the beginning and end would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The stages are presented in a broadly chronological order, and linking expressions such as “after this,” “after that,” and “then” help signal movement through the process. However, the response is written as one long block, with no clear overview separated from the stage details. Several transitions are repetitive, and the sequence becomes difficult to follow in places, particularly around “when this came liquid form” and “after some times weave.” The final comments about the process being easy, taking a long time, and being a “simple explanation” interrupt rather than conclude the process description. Use a clear overview followed by logically grouped stages, and make each transition show the relationship between steps precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “strips,” “liquid,” “long fiber,” “amine oxide,” “spin,” and “weave,” so the reader can recognise several stages. However, the range is limited and many phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the intended meaning unclear. Examples include “give him liquid form,” “make in yamm,” and “make softness”; these do not express the process clearly. Spelling errors such as “waater,” “proccess,” and “reailty” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise process terms and natural collocations, such as describing pulp being filtered to separate fibres, which are then spun into yarn and woven into fabric. Check spelling carefully and avoid unsupported descriptive claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect stages in longer sentences using words such as “when,” “then,” and “after,” but these structures are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not controlled consistently. For example, “When this came liquid form we different the long fiber from the liquid” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “after that long process we spin into a thread” shifts awkwardly between past and present forms and omits a clear subject. Articles, verb forms, and sentence punctuation are also frequently inaccurate, as in “the bamboo tree is ready to making our clothes.” These errors sometimes make relationships between steps difficult to understand. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate passive forms such as “the strips are crushed” and “the fibres are spun.”

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