Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

First plant the bambo .Then give it our full attention as long as it grown .Give water as well as attentrion to grown up.Plant it in the Spring sesson.When it is grown up harvester come to harvest in Automan sesson .He cut the Bamboo in the strips as he wanted it may be large or short .Then comes the methord what to do with these stips .He needs to soften these strips this is because he needs soften strips for his work .Then comes the methord how to soft them .He must use the exect method.He use water or amine oxide to do this task.He use this method as long as it would become soft. Then he filter these strips frome the water or amine oxide to make it use able . He needs liquid pulp .So he needs to crush these strips of Bamboo so he would do crushing to get the liquid pulp. This is the main method how to get Fabric from Bamboo.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises that bamboo is planted in spring, harvested in autumn, cut into strips and processed to make fabric. However, it reports the stages inaccurately and incompletely: it says the strips are softened before crushing and filtering, whereas the diagram shows crushing to make liquid pulp, filtering to separate long fibres, and then softening those fibres with water and amine oxide. The later stages—spinning the fibres into yarn, weaving fabric, and producing clothing—are omitted. There is also no clear overview of the process as a whole. These gaps and misreadings mean the response addresses the diagram only minimally. To improve, summarise the complete sequence accurately and identify its broad progression from growing bamboo to finished garments.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic sequencing, with phrases such as “First,” “Then,” and “Then comes” helping the reader follow parts of the process. However, the response does not maintain a clear progression: it moves from cutting to softening, then filtering, and only afterwards to crushing, which reverses the diagram’s order. Repeated explanations such as “Then comes the method” and “He needs” make the account feel circular rather than organised. The ideas are also presented as one continuous paragraph, with no distinct overview or grouping of stages. Use a clear beginning-to-end sequence, connect each stage once, and separate the overview from the detailed process to make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant process words, including “plant,” “harvest,” “filter,” “crush,” and “liquid pulp,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several choices or spellings make the meaning less clear: “attentrion,” “sesson,” “Automan,” “stips,” and “use able.” Some wording is also imprecise for the diagram, such as “soften these strips,” when the fibres are softened after filtering. Repeated phrases like “do this task” and “this is the main method” add little information. Build a more precise process vocabulary and check spelling; for example, use “separate the fibres” and “spin the fibres into yarn” to describe the stages accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, including “When it is grown up harvester come to harvest in Automan sesson,” but control of sentence structure is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. Verb forms and agreement are inconsistent: “He use” should be “He uses,” while “harvester come” needs an article and a correctly inflected verb. The opening also contains incomplete or awkward constructions, such as “First plant the bambo” and “Give water as well as attention to grown up.” Articles, tense, and punctuation are often missing or inconsistent, and many sentences begin with “He” without a clear need. Practise accurate simple passive forms for process descriptions, such as “The bamboo is harvested,” before attempting longer clauses.

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