Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This diagram illustrate that how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. most of the fabric we daily wear is manufactured from bamboo we daily use to wear Initially the first to become the bamboo is grown in spring season and then matured in autumn. Next than afterward in the second step the bamboo is cutt by the farmers. sebsequently followed by in the third step show that the bamboo is strip in to pieces by the cutter machine and then it is ready for crushing. Then afterward in the 4 step this is shown that that how the bamboo strip is grind and covert to liquid pulp so that they can be filtered. Sebsequently followed bt the 5 step show that how the liquid pulps are filtered and separates long fiber from liquid and other wastes from liquid. After that the 6 step in which the fiber is soften and now some water and amine oxides is added to it for softness and to make it think so that we can make long fiber from it now.In the step 7 a long thin fibers are make from it that will now used to manufacture a piece of fabric. Finally ultimately some cloths such and t shirts socks sweat shirts and other daily use wear is made from that fiber. in addition to also showing the result also showing that how cloths fiber is made.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the process as bamboo becoming fabric and include several relevant stages, such as planting in spring, harvesting in autumn, filtering fibres, and making yarn and clothing. However, the account is not consistently accurate: the diagram shows bamboo being cut into strips by a saw, not by farmers, and the final products shown are a T-shirt and socks, not sweatshirts or other clothing. Some steps are also confused or incompletely described, and there is no clear overview highlighting the process’s overall progression from growing bamboo to finished garments. To improve, give a concise overview first, then report the stages in order using only details supported by the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows much of the process sequence, and words such as “Initially,” “Next,” and “Finally” help the reader recognise movement through the stages. However, progression is weakened by repeated and sometimes conflicting linkers, including “Next than afterward,” “Sebsequently followed by,” and “Finally ultimately.” The response is presented as one long paragraph, while several sentences run together or shift abruptly between ideas; for example, the explanation of softening fibres moves into making long fibres without a clear boundary. Organise the answer into an introduction and overview, followed by logically grouped stages. Use a small number of accurate sequencing expressions and clear sentence boundaries so each step is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “liquid pulp,” “filtered,” “fibres,” and “amine oxide,” which helps convey the diagram’s subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the description unclear, such as “the bamboo is strip,” “grind and covert,” and “make it think.” Repetition of “step,” “bamboo,” and “fiber” also reduces precision, while spelling errors such as “sebsequently” and “cutt” are noticeable. Aim to use accurate process verbs and collocations, for example, “cut into strips,” “crushed to form pulp,” “separate fibres,” and “woven into fabric.” Check spelling and avoid adding unsupported product names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect stages in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often faulty and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “This diagram illustrate that how fabric is manufactured” and “the bamboo is strip in to pieces,” where subject–verb agreement, clause structure, and verb forms are not controlled. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “a long thin fibers are make,” and punctuation is inconsistent, with run-on sentences such as the opening. Use straightforward sentences with one main stage in each, and check that each has a clear subject and correctly formed verb. Then practise joining ideas with accurate clauses such as “After the strips are crushed, the pulp is filtered.”

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