Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This diagram reflects how bamboo uses for manufacturing cloth. From this diagram, we can see a full process of manufacturing clothes from bamboo where the process begin with planting bamboo and end by weaving.

Different types of multi tasking have to be done for making a perfect dress where variety of processing stages should have been passed successfully.

From the graph we can see about planting some of bamboo trees which have processed to yarn by numerious steps for making a perfect cloth. And in these stages, begin with planting at Spring and at Autumn harvested output from plantation for further processing. As cut in to strips after harvesting liquid pulp are producing by

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the broad subject and mention the seasonal stages: bamboo is planted in spring and harvested in autumn. However, the response does not adequately summarise the process shown. It stops partway through the production stages, with “liquid pulp are producing by” left unfinished, and omits filtering, softening, spinning, weaving, and the final clothing products. The overview also incorrectly says the process ends “by weaving”; the diagram continues to finished garments. The response is 114 words, below the required 150, and this contributes to the limited coverage. To improve, give a complete overview of the start and end points, then report the main stages in sequence using the diagram’s details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by a general comment and then a description of the early stages. Phrases such as “From this diagram” and “And in these stages” signal connections between ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the second paragraph is vague and does not advance the process description, while the final paragraph breaks off mid-sentence. The sequence is not carried through to the later stages, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate an overview from the detailed account. Use a clear overview paragraph, followed by a chronological description, and connect each stage explicitly with concise sequencing language.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant process vocabulary, including “planting,” “harvested,” “strips,” “liquid pulp,” and “yarn,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “bamboo uses for manufacturing cloth,” “multi tasking,” and “perfect dress.” “Graph” is also not the appropriate term for a process diagram. Spelling errors such as “numerious” and the phrase “cut in to” reduce precision. Aim for accurate process terms and natural collocations, for example, describe bamboo as being processed into fabric and refer to “stages” rather than “multi tasking.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “From this diagram, we can see…” and a sentence linking planting and harvesting. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. Examples include “the process begin” instead of “the process begins,” “which have processed to yarn” instead of a passive form such as “which are processed into yarn,” and “liquid pulp are producing by,” which is incomplete and has faulty verb agreement and form. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “planting some of bamboo trees.” These errors sometimes make the intended relationships unclear. Practise accurate passive structures for manufacturing processes and check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence completion.

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