Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THIS DIAGRAM SHOW THAT ALL PROCESS OF BOMBOO FABRIC.

IN FIRST STAGE THE BAMBOO PLANT SPRING IN THE EARTH AND THE FARMAR WAITH THAT TIME WHEN ITS READY FOR CUT INTO STRICKS AND MOVE ITS A LIQUID PULP. AFTER THIS PROCESS THE LIQUID ARE SAPRATE FROM FIBRES.AMINE OXIDE GAS ADD IN THE WATER AND IT TURN TO A SOFTEN FIBRES .AFTER THAT THE FIBRES TURN INTO A YAM FACE .ITS SPIN FACE FABRIC ALSO SELL IN MARKET .BUT FOR HIGH RATE OF MARGINE THE SUPPLAER CANT IT SELL IN LOCAL MARKET.FOR THE PRODUCTION OF CLOTH ITS MOVE IN FACTORY AND INDUSTRY AND MAKE CLOTHES , JECKETS FABRIC FOR SHIRTS AND SUITS.AND SELL ITS IN SHOPPING MALLS IN HIGH PRICES THIS IS A HOLE JURNEY OF BOMBOO FABRIC .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the general subject and mention several relevant stages, including planting, harvesting, separating fibres, softening them, spinning yarn and making fabric. However, the account is incomplete and some details do not match the diagram: it does not say the supplier sells yarn in a local market, that production moves to factories for high-priced clothing, or that there is a high profit margin. The sequence is also unclear, and key steps such as cutting bamboo into strips, crushing it into pulp, and weaving the fabric are not accurately explained. The response is 128 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a concise overview of the full process and report only stages and details shown in the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to present the process in sequence, using phrases such as “IN FIRST STAGE,” “AFTER THIS PROCESS,” and “AFTER THAT.” These help the reader recognise that the response concerns stages. However, the writing is presented as one continuous block, and the progression becomes difficult to follow when it shifts from fibre processing to unsupported claims about markets, factories and prices. Some links are unclear, as in “move its a liquid pulp,” so the relationship between actions is not easy to understand. Organise the response into an introduction and a process description, then use clear sequencing language to connect each stage in the diagram’s order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant process words, including “plant,” “fibres,” “water,” “spin,” and “fabric,” which makes the topic recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret, such as “BOMBOO,” “STRICKS,” “SAPRATE,” “YAM FACE,” and “HOLE JURNEY.” Some expressions are also unsuitable or unsupported for describing the diagram, including “high rate of margine” and “sell its in shopping malls in high prices.” Use accurate process vocabulary and check spelling; for example, describe bamboo being cut into strips, crushed into pulp, filtered, softened, spun into yarn, and woven into fabric.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect several stages in longer sentences, but sentence structures are mostly simple or run together, and errors are frequent enough to obscure relationships. For example, “THE BAMBOO PLANT SPRING IN THE EARTH” lacks a clear verb construction, while “THE LIQUID ARE SAPRATE FROM FIBRES” has problems with agreement and passive form. The sentence beginning “AFTER THIS PROCESS” also runs into the next idea without reliable punctuation. Try using controlled passive forms suited to a process description, such as “The bamboo is harvested in autumn” and “The fibres are softened by adding water and amine oxide.” Separate each stage into a complete sentence and check verb forms, articles, and agreement.

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