Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Introduction: The diagram illustrates the process of making bamboo fabric. how the fabric made step-by step. Overall, there are nine stages in the process , beginning with planting bamboo and ending with the production of clothes and other fabric products. Body paragraph 1: There nine stages in the process have initially stage grow bamboo are grown in spring and the second stage are collecting the leave in (Autumn).Third stage cut into strips and four stage to seperat they leaves five stage filter there leaves ( seperat longs fibres from liquid). stages six soften fibres and stage seven

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the process as making bamboo fabric and give a relevant overview: it has nine stages, starts with planting, and ends with clothing and other products. You also mention spring, autumn, cutting, filtering and softening, showing some understanding of the diagram. However, the account is incomplete: it stops during stage seven and does not report spinning into yarn, weaving, or the final clothing stage in the body. Some details are inaccurate or unclear, such as describing the harvest as collecting “the leave” and saying stage four separates material, when the strips are crushed into liquid pulp. The response is also 53 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise the full process. Cover every stage accurately and develop the overview and sequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a body paragraph, and the overview gives the reader a useful starting point and endpoint. The numbered sequence also suggests an intended chronological order. However, progression becomes difficult to follow because the body is compressed into a long, unfinished sequence, with unclear links between stages: “Third stage cut into strips and four stage to seperat they leaves five stage filter…” The response ends abruptly at “stage seven,” so the later stages are not connected or presented. Punctuation and spacing around transitions are inconsistent. Use separate, complete sentences and group the agricultural stages, processing stages and final manufacturing stages into a clear sequence, using linking phrases such as “After this” and “Finally”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use several relevant process terms, including “planting,” “harvesting,” “strips,” “filter,” “fibres” and “liquid,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. “Production of clothes” is also a suitable way to describe the endpoint. However, the range is limited and some word choices or forms make details unclear: “collecting the leave” does not accurately name the harvested material, while “seperat they leaves” and “longs fibres” are difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “seperat” occur more than once, and “fabric products” is broad where the diagram shows clothing. Build a more precise process vocabulary and check spelling; for example, use “harvest the bamboo stalks,” “crush the strips into pulp,” and “separate the long fibres from the liquid.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few different sentence functions, including an introductory statement and an overview, but most of the body relies on incomplete or poorly controlled sentence patterns. For example, “There nine stages in the process have initially stage grow bamboo are grown in spring” combines several structures without a clear grammatical relationship. There are also problems with articles, agreement and verb forms in “the second stage are collecting,” and the final phrase “stages six soften fibres and stage seven” is unfinished. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are inconsistent, which further obscures meaning. Practise writing one complete sentence for each group of stages, with a clear subject and verb—for example, “Bamboo is planted in spring and harvested in autumn.” Then check agreement, articles and tense before submitting.

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