Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

When i was young around 18 I was working in clothing factory.It was part time wasnt required much experience.First when I reached there my supervisor started explaining me and my other part timers everything about work. He was quite polite to us.First he started explaining us that in beginning of spring everyone of our team have to plant bamboos in fields they have already added effective minerals to soil.

In autumn when the bamboo plant has turned into adult form the main part harvesting starts .then the bamboo we collected we have to send it to factory where other workers cut that into strips some by machine and some by hands to fasten up the work . The strips then go to machine which crushes them to achieve the liquid plup ,then it have to go through filtration phase which gives us two components we get separate fibres and we get a in here that these are too hard to soften it we need to add amine oxide and then we get the threads of them .

After it we can spin it and make bamboo yarn of high quality futher more these yarns are taken to weave by workers by hans to make excellent fabric. After all these months the all hard work we get to last step of making clothes by machine these are premium quality clothes which we get after hard work of peoples

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad sequence from planting and harvesting through processing to fabric and clothing, and several stages—crushing, filtering, softening, spinning and weaving—are recognisable. However, the response only partially fulfils the diagram-summary task because it becomes a personal account of working in a factory (“When i was young…”) rather than an objective overview. It also adds unsupported details, such as minerals being added to the soil, some cutting being done by hand, and workers weaving by hand. The overview is not clearly stated, and the final clothing stage is mentioned without explaining that the diagram shows finished garments. Focus on the process itself, accurately report the labelled stages, and give a concise overview of its progression from seasonal cultivation to clothing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a broadly chronological structure: cultivation and harvesting come first, followed by processing and then yarn, fabric and clothes. Paragraph breaks also separate parts of the process. However, the progression is weakened by the opening personal anecdote and by long, loosely connected sentences, especially the section beginning “The strips then go to machine.” Connectors such as “First,” “then” and “After it” help signal sequence, but some are repetitive or unclear, and punctuation makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Organise the report into a brief introduction and overview, followed by clearly grouped stages. Use precise links such as “Next,” “Following filtration” and “Finally,” and make sure each sentence presents one or two connected steps.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “strips,” “crushes,” “filtration,” “fibres,” “spin” and “weave,” which helps communicate the main stages. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “liquid pulp” and “amine oxide.” However, inaccurate or awkward choices sometimes obscure meaning: “adult form” is not a natural description of mature bamboo, “threads” is less precise than “yarn” here, and “a in here” makes the filtration output unclear. Spelling and word-form errors such as “plup,” “futher” and “peoples” also reduce control. Build a reliable set of process terms and use neutral, accurate wording rather than evaluative phrases such as “excellent fabric” and “premium quality clothes,” which the diagram does not establish.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response generally conveys the order of the process. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, as in “in beginning of spring everyone of our team have to plant bamboos,” where articles, agreement and tense are problematic. Other examples include “it have to go through filtration phase” and “these yarns are taken to weave,” which show recurring errors in agreement and sentence construction. Missing or inconsistent punctuation—such as “factory.It” and the run-on sequence after “liquid plup”—also makes the text harder to read. Practise writing clear present-simple process sentences, for example, “The strips are crushed to produce liquid pulp.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries before finishing.

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