Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Global fashion trends have social impacts, people are highly impressed by fashion trends these days which you see in their day to day dressing.How indiviuals becomes this invested in fashion's trends and how strongly it's influencing people lives?We are going to disscuss positive and negative aspects of this development

I partially agree to these thesis.Social media is big plateform that is used world wide.People spend so many time in doome scrolling they follow diffrent fashion influencer and try to dress like them.For intance big plateforms are inviting influencer to their shows and they live stream fashion show through their social's people get to watch them and these cleberity encourages people to dress like that and they get influenced by them recently victoria secret fashion show happend and you get to see all the influencer going their and some of them recreating their pieces at home. People are making content out of it and social media has stronger impact on people lives.

I believe people are very much into following international fashion trends that they forgot their traditional fashion.It's impacting our society very nagatively and they have set the standards for fashion which is not neccesary.Secondly people are getting more anxious about how other feels about the way they dressed up or they might be behind them because they are not following trends.Just to fit in the society they are doing things out of their comfort zone people should be considerate about that because of that they are stressing theirselves it's affecting their mental well being.

Getting along with fashion trends in one thing but making a big deal out of it is harmful.We should try to synv in fashion naturaly not forcefully.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you explain social media’s role in spreading trends and give a negative view, citing loss of traditional dress and anxiety about appearance. However, the response only partially develops the task. The opening says “I partially agree,” although the prompt asks whether the development is positive or negative, so your position is not fully clear; the conclusion later calls it harmful. The explanation of how fashion became influential is mainly one example about influencers and a fashion show, and the link between this example and global influence could be explained more fully. Develop the causes and consequences with clearer reasoning and specific supporting details, and state your overall judgement directly from the introduction onward.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from an introduction to the influence of social media, then to negative effects, and finally to a brief conclusion. Paragraphing helps distinguish the main points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, especially in the long sentence about the fashion show, livestreaming, celebrities and people recreating outfits. Connections such as “Secondly” signal another point, but the relationship between ideas is not always made explicit, and the conclusion introduces “getting along with fashion trends” without clearly summarising the earlier argument. Use shorter, more controlled sentences, make each paragraph’s main point clear, and use referencing and linking phrases accurately rather than relying on a few repeated transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “fashion influencer,” “traditional fashion,” “standards,” and “mental well being,” and these choices help communicate your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear or natural, such as “plateform,” “doome scrolling,” “cleberity,” and “synv in fashion.” Some phrases are also imprecise, including “big plateforms” and “people are very much into following.” Aim for accurate spelling and more precise collocations, particularly when describing how trends spread and how they affect people. Vary repeated general terms such as “people” and “fashion,” while keeping the vocabulary natural and appropriate to an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a cause-and-effect idea in “Just to fit in the society they are doing things out of their comfort zone.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the meaning. For example, “How indiviuals becomes this invested” has incorrect question structure and subject–verb agreement, while “people spend so many time” has an agreement and quantifier problem. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the opening and the fashion-show example. Practise forming complete questions and clauses, checking singular and plural agreement, and separating independent ideas with full stops or suitable conjunctions.

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