Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Global fashion has become more influential mainly through the social media and cheap mass production,and i believe the overall effects in positive way, with some drawbacks.

Global fashion now shape the people life and numerous people want and like to show their identification in more advanced wat,therefore more and more people like to wear those thing which is trendy in the enviroment.like this way people often watch the fashion dress and other fashion realted things on social media like instagram and tik tok where the influancers use the more famous and newly dress to advertise the things,subsequently in this way people are try to copy the influancers.Adding this, people often want to adopt to fashion.likethis its firstly advantage is the people personallity is boost up and they look more confident and people admire them in this way.Addtionally, its also more beneficial for the industrise and the brands whom the people more attract their side and they earn lot of much.

on the other hand, it has some drawback also for the people.Following this, when people buy the branded things and they spend a more of their money in this way,and also when they buy such this kind things they also feel more worried about their home budget.furthermore, when people buy new clothes so they waste thier old one in the enviroment which is mainly the pollution in the environment.

Therefore, i believe that its beneficial to look the people more confident and also the financial problems maybe solve the industries and brands, in contrast its more harmful when people waste and spend more money this way.

In conclusion, fashion has boost up the confidence and also create more chance to make money by the industries and some drawback is financial problem and cause the enivironment pollution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify social media and mass production as influences, and you give a qualified view that fashion is beneficial overall despite drawbacks. The example of influencers promoting clothes on Instagram and TikTok is relevant, as are your points about confidence, industry income, personal spending and pollution. However, the explanation of how mass production makes trends influential is not developed, and several effects are asserted rather than explained. For instance, the claim that fashion can solve financial problems for industries is unclear, and the conclusion mostly repeats earlier points. To strengthen the response, explain the mechanisms and consequences more fully, and support each main point with a specific example or clearer reasoning. The position is present, though its balance could be more precise throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph about social media and benefits, a paragraph on drawbacks, and a conclusion. This makes the main direction understandable. You also use linking expressions such as “on the other hand,” “furthermore” and “in conclusion” to signal relationships between ideas. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, with repeated transitions such as “in this way” and “therefore,” and some references are unclear—for example, “they earn lot of much” does not clearly identify who earns what. The first body paragraph also combines the causes of fashion’s influence with several effects, making its progression less clear. Give each paragraph a more focused purpose, connect claims with explicit explanations, and use pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “social media,” “trendy,” “branded,” “confidence,” “industries” and “environment pollution.” These choices allow the reader to follow your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “show their identification,” “fashion realted things,” “the people personallity,” and “financial problems maybe solve the industries.” Some words and phrases are also repeated, particularly “people,” “in this way” and “fashion.” Build a more precise set of expressions for describing trends, consumer behaviour and environmental effects, and check spelling carefully. Aim to use familiar vocabulary accurately rather than forcing more advanced wording into unclear phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, such as the sentence beginning “when people buy the branded things.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure. However, control is inconsistent: errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction occur across the response and sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, “Global fashion now shape” needs subject–verb agreement, while “people are try to copy” has an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also joins clauses without clear punctuation, and several sentences run together. Practise forming accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using patterns such as “because,” “which” and “although.” Check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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