Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Several aspects of the way people dress in the modern world are influenced by world's fashion trends. In my opinion, global fashion trends has become a strong influence on people's lives because of the advancement of technology. This has resulted into individuals respecting different cultures thats why I believe this is a positive development.

To begin with, technology has made it easier for people to access information on various sectors. Fashion has not been left behind. With the introduction of the internet, individuals can easily copy designs of different tailors and adopt the ones that are suitable for them. People can learn how to integrate traditional culture and modern designs to suit the theme of their day. For example, a designer can make bags with traditional sisal and touch it up with latest fashion trend. This will be attractive to older and young generations because it meets their needs. As a result, its easier for people to choose the bag for their occasions because it is multifaceted . Ultimately becoming a strong influence on their lives.

Global fashion trends have helped individuals learn how to accept other people's culture because individuals can now easily understand the reason behind why certain ethnic groups dress in a different way. For instance, the internet has interconnected the world , many people understand why the islamic people wear kanzus and why their women are always on long dresses. This understanding has made people not to get culture shocks when they meet in parties. Thus learning how to accept and respect different cultures leading to harmonious living in society.

In conclusion, as the internet has made the world

increasingly interconnected, it has also helped people understand fashion and respect cultures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: technology is presented as the reason global fashion spreads, and you clearly judge the development positively because it can encourage cultural understanding. The examples of online access to designs and traditional sisal bags are relevant and help explain how trends affect clothing and accessories. However, the explanation of how fashion itself becomes influential is not always fully clear: the discussion moves from copying designs to choosing a bag for occasions without showing in detail how global trends shape people’s everyday choices. The paragraph about cultural respect is also more developed as a benefit than as an explanation of fashion’s influence. Extend these links with specific examples of platforms, celebrities, or brands that spread styles, and explain their effects.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your position, two body paragraphs develop related points, and a conclusion restates the positive view. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. However, some connections are abrupt or mechanical. “Ultimately becoming a strong influence on their lives” is a sentence fragment, and the link between adopting designs and respecting cultures could be made more explicit. There is also some repetition of “individuals” and “people,” while “This understanding” has a somewhat broad reference. Use clearer links between each example and the main claim, and vary referencing and transitions so the progression feels more continuous.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “traditional culture,” “modern designs,” “interconnected,” and “culture shocks.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the examples give you opportunities to use more specific language. Some word choices and collocations are imprecise, however: “various sectors” is vague in this context, “copy designs of different tailors” is not a natural way to describe fashion influence, and “touch it up with latest fashion trend” is awkward. “Multifaceted” is also not quite the right description for a bag that suits different needs or occasions. Aim for more precise expressions such as “fashion content,” “adapt designs,” and “incorporate current trends”; check spelling and apostrophes in forms such as “Islamic” and “that’s.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including clauses beginning “because,” “With the introduction of the internet,” and “As a result.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. For example, “global fashion trends has become” has subject–verb disagreement, while “This will be attractive to older and young generations” has an awkward parallel construction. “Ultimately becoming a strong influence on their lives” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence, and “the reason behind why” uses an unnecessary structure. Review agreement, sentence completeness, and clause construction. Combining the fragment with the preceding sentence and checking each sentence for a clear subject and finite verb would improve accuracy while preserving your range.

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