Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people try to follow worldwide fashion trends and dress up accordingly these days. Some of the reasons it has become so common are social media exposure, societal pressure and advertisement campaings. In my opinion, this can promote high living standards in a society and should be avoided.

Global networking and immense usage of social media apps has revolutionised the whole world and this is the key reason that now a model living in USA has inluenced a girl residing in East Asia to wear certain type of clothes. The young generation are more impacted by these trends and consider them mandatory to get attention on social media. Also, society pressure is another reason which forces people to follow along in the name of staying up-to-date. Many social media content creators and lifestyle models take money and freebies from the brands to promote their products. As a result of these campaigns, a thing becomes famous internationally and ends up impacting large audience. For example, Kylie Jenner told her audiences that she uses canon g7x camera to take her sunset pictures and the camer became so famous that now people order it prior months to get it delivered and it's always sold out on every store.

Setting up and following such trends lead to promoting unacheiveable living standard for many people. People become judgy towards each other’s looks and lifestyles. Not all people are privileged enough to run behind these fashion standards and buy every single product that gets trendy. This societal pressure can affect the mental health of new generation and they may start finding happiness in only materialistic goals. For example, a teenager boy in India commited suicide when his father refused to buy him an Iphone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the prompt: you explain the influence of social media, social pressure and advertising, and you state that the development is negative. The examples of Kylie Jenner’s camera promotion and a teenager’s response to being denied an iPhone make your points concrete. However, the position is not fully consistent: the introduction says fashion trends “can promote high living standards,” which conflicts with the later argument that they create “unachievable living standard[s].” The explanation of how trends spread is more developed than the discussion of their effects, and the camera example illustrates product promotion more directly than clothing fashion. Clarify your overall judgement and extend the consequences with a more directly relevant fashion example to make the response more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: the introduction presents causes and a view, the first body paragraph explains how trends spread, and the second discusses negative effects. Linking phrases such as “Also,” “As a result,” and “For example” help readers follow the sequence. However, some connections are mechanical, and the opening claim about promoting high living standards does not lead naturally into the later criticism of unrealistic standards. The first body paragraph also combines social media influence, peer pressure and advertising without clearly separating how each contributes. Use clearer topic sentences and transitions that show the relationship between these causes, and make the introduction’s position consistent with the conclusion of your reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “societal pressure,” “up-to-date,” “materialistic goals” and “mental health.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and some less common expressions show an attempt to discuss social effects precisely. There are, however, several spelling errors, including “campaings,” “inluenced,” “unacheiveable” and “commited,” as well as awkward or imprecise phrases such as “immense usage” and “large audience.” “High living standards” also does not express the intended idea of unrealistic consumer expectations. Proofread carefully and choose more natural collocations, such as “widespread use,” “a large audience,” and “unrealistic lifestyle expectations,” to improve precision and fluency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning “when” and “that,” and most of the meaning remains clear. Some grammatical errors occur, but they rarely prevent understanding. For example, “Global networking and immense usage … has” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “The young generation are” and “society pressure” show further issues with agreement and noun forms. Articles and plurals also need attention in phrases such as “certain type of clothes” and “on every store.” Review agreement with compound subjects, article use, and singular/plural forms. Breaking up a few long sentences and checking punctuation around clauses would also make the argument easier to read.

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