Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It's may not have a negative impacts on human lives but it's also not may impact positive because human may use and select western dresses that are not suitable for Muslims because in Islam the women may cover all the body parts so on the Islamic point of view it's may have negative impacts on people and and the girls may perform not acceptable thing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You express a relevant concern: global fashion may conflict with Muslim expectations about modest dress, and you indicate that you view this influence negatively. However, the response addresses the question only minimally. It does not explain how global fashion became influential, and the negative judgement is not developed with clear reasons or a specific example. The phrase “the girls may perform not acceptable thing” is too vague to show what consequence you mean. The response also falls substantially short of the required 250 words, leaving both parts of the task largely unanswered. To improve, explain causes such as social media, celebrities, or international brands, then develop your view with a clear example and a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic connection between your concern about Western clothing and your view that global fashion can have negative effects. However, the response is a single, very short sentence, so ideas are not organised into paragraphs or developed in a clear progression. The repeated “and” in “and and the girls” makes the connection between points unclear, while “so” does not clearly show how the earlier point leads to the final claim. Use separate paragraphs for the causes of global influence, your evaluation, and a conclusion. Within them, connect each claim to an explanation or example, using linking expressions such as “for example” and “as a result” accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “global fashion,” “western dresses,” and “Islamic point of view,” which makes your main concern identifiable. However, the range is narrow, and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “negative impacts on human lives,” “cover all the body parts,” and “perform not acceptable thing.” These choices make the final idea especially difficult to understand. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing clothing, cultural values, and influence—for example, “modest clothing,” “cultural expectations,” and “fashion trends.” Also choose natural collocations, such as “have a negative effect on people,” and explain unfamiliar or broad claims with specific wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your response attempts to connect several ideas in one sentence, but the sentence structure is not controlled, and errors repeatedly obscure the relationships between those ideas. For example, “It's may not have” combines incompatible forms, while “it's also not may impact positive” has an unclear verb pattern and word order. The clause beginning “because in Islam” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and the repeated “and” disrupts punctuation and sentence flow. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, such as “Global fashion may have negative effects on some people.” Then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking subject–verb patterns, modal verbs, and punctuation before attempting longer sentences.

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