Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This is true that the people are influenced by global fashion trends. i dscuss these aspect one bby one in this topic. it has impact psotive and negative development.

Fist postive asspect is that people know the fashion through the social media . many customer buy the product many adveristment such as video and images to cath the customer the companies use model, actor and influcers to promote their product . its helps to earn the money through the adveristment and new fashion trends are arrival through the famous actor and people are impress by these adveristment and buy these product its is benefits for making making a money and also help for giverment to generate tax when the people buy these product then taxes pay and the companies also pay the taxes which boom the econmic it aslo increse the employemnt which has postive aspect and remove the poority,.

If i talk about the negative aspect the first of all the when new factory made the pollution increase in envirnment which casue the health issue such as lung disease which affect the resiparted truck yo see that in lahore many people dead due to pollution factory is most important factort to make pollution. other than that people are waste of money when they see the new trends they without seeing the pocket which can make finacial insability. while other thing is that global fashion are also negative affect on our generations. Mostly young generation waste the many on the usless thing and they are not focus on education, skill set . because these adveristment has negative impact on young childer they may believe that fashion make becautiful this can affect their confindence and their image .

In conclusion is that global fashion trend have postive and negtive impact on generation and its also affect their personal lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you mention social media, advertising, celebrities and influencers as ways fashion spreads, and you discuss both benefits and drawbacks. However, the explanation of how fashion became influential is brief and mostly focused on promotion; it would be stronger with a clearer account of how online platforms expose people to trends repeatedly and make them easy to copy or buy. Your positive position is also difficult to identify: the opening says the development has both effects, while the conclusion simply repeats this without judging whether it is positive or negative overall. Several points, such as tax revenue, pollution and young people’s confidence, are relevant but need clearer explanation or a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on positive effects, a paragraph on negative effects and a conclusion. This helps the reader recognise the main sections. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves rapidly from advertising to company profits, taxes, economic growth and employment, without clearly showing how each point connects. Linking phrases such as “If i talk about the negative aspect” and “other than that” are repetitive or awkward, and some references, including “these product,” are unclear. Use one main idea per paragraph, develop it in a logical sequence, and connect examples explicitly to the point they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “social media,” “advertisement,” “pollution,” “financial instability” and “confidence.” This gives you enough language to communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow: “new fashion trends are arrival,” “people are waste of money,” and “which boom the econmic” are examples. Spelling errors such as “adveristment,” “envirnment” and “childer” are also frequent and reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing influence and consequences, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express cause and effect and to use longer sentences, for example when explaining how advertising can lead people to buy products. However, sentence structures are limited, and many longer attempts are difficult to follow because of errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms. Examples include “This is true that the people are influenced,” “many customer buy,” and “global fashion trend have.” Punctuation is also often missing, creating run-on sentences in both body paragraphs. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with conjunctions such as “because” and “which.” Check subject–verb agreement and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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