Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, global fashion become such a stong influence on people lives because they always focus world trends. Some people think that dress today are infuenced by global fashion trends. In my opinion, i think this is positive development.

On the one hand, todays world are become modern day by day, therefore every industry every year arrange fashion awards and also they represent there own dress and influenced public. For example, in Bangladesh, Textail industy last year attened American fashion award and they publised there better quality product and finally they achieved first rank of the award. Every year lot's of country reliesed there product and influenced consumer..

On the second hand, global fashion become such a strong influence on people lives. For illustrate, fashion trends always influenced other people like American people always focus fashion trens. they always accepet positively. Global fashion day by day strong because every single person they follow for there dress.

In conclusion, although many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends, also global fashion became such a strong influence on people lives. I think there are positive view rather then neagitivety.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear view—“I think this is positive development”—and attempt to address both how global fashion influences people and whether this is positive or negative. However, the explanation of how the influence spreads remains vague: references to fashion awards and people following trends are not developed into clear causes, such as social media, advertising, or international brands. The Bangladesh example is difficult to interpret and does not clearly show how a fashion award influenced people’s clothing choices. Your conclusion repeats the position without adding support. The response contains 170 words, so it is 80 words below the 250-word minimum; the 22 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop relevant reasons and examples in more detail to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and you use signposts such as “On the one hand” and “In conclusion.” These help the reader recognise the stages of your response. However, the ideas do not progress clearly within the body paragraphs: the first moves from modernisation to awards and then to product releases, while the connection to global influence is not explained. The second paragraph largely repeats the claim that people follow fashion. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically or inaccurately, and the repeated wording makes the argument feel circular. Give each paragraph one clear main idea, explain how its supporting example relates to that idea, and use references and transitions to show the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “global fashion,” “trends,” “industry,” “product,” and “consumer,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and several choices or spellings make meaning less clear, such as “Textail industy,” “reliesed,” and “fashion trens.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “focus world trends,” “achieved first rank of the award,” and “for illustrate.” Repetition of “influenced” and “fashion” further restricts the range. Build a more accurate set of expressions for causes and effects, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe brands as “promoting collections internationally” or consumers as “adopting styles popularised overseas.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect link with “therefore” and a contrast introduced by “although.” However, control is inconsistent, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “global fashion become,” “people lives,” “todays world are become,” and “they always focus for there dress,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “i” and the double full stop after “consumer..” Work first on accurate basic clauses: for example, “Global fashion has become influential in people’s lives” and “People follow international trends when choosing clothes.” Then add longer structures only when you can maintain accurate grammar throughout.

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