Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Nowadays, people dressing is greatly influenced by the worldwide fashion trends. While it has brought various positive changes, it also has some drawbacks. In the coming paragraphs I will discuss both the positive and negative development of this trend on people's life.
Overall, people from every corner of the world are strongly influenced by the global fashion. As they become bored of wearing same kinds of clothes every day, in office, at home or in the colleges. People always wanted to try new things and one of the most important changes for the majority is fashion. In past, not many people are interested in fashion as it was not something fascinating for them. But now the changing trends gather huge attention.
One of the positive developments of this trend is the variety it offers to people of all ages. Even it's a child, a young adult or an old person all can now wear new and modern kinds of clothes and with a lot of versatility. In past young ladies mostly wear skirts and tops. But now they have a lot of options like baggy jeans, bootcut jeans and different kinds of cardigans. The same applies to fashion trends among men.
One negative impact of global fashion on today's society is the bold dressing. Many famous fashion designers are making clothes that are very bold and exposing. The modesty of past men and women are gone by following these fashion trends. You must have to wear sleeveless top with small shorts to look modern and rich. Now some people believe that the increasing trend of women wearing excessively revealing clothing in public reflects a growing acceptance of immodesty and obscenity in modern society.
In conclusion, the increasing global fashion trends have both positive and negative developments. One should follow them with complete knowledge of the consequences it comes with. Therefore, its benefits and drawbacks should be carefully considered to ensure a balanced approach.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses both questions: it identifies variety as a benefit and revealing clothing as a drawback, and it gives a clear overall view that fashion has mixed effects. However, the explanation of how global fashion became influential is only partly developed. The paragraph mentions boredom with familiar clothes and growing attention to changing trends, but does not explain the role of mechanisms such as social media, celebrities, advertising, or international brands. The positive example of changing clothing options is relevant, while the negative point is asserted broadly and would benefit from a specific example and a clearer explanation of its effects. To strengthen the response, develop both the causes of fashion’s influence and the reasoning behind the final judgement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay has a clear overall arrangement, with an introduction, separate discussion of positive and negative effects, and a conclusion. The reader can follow the main progression, and phrases such as “One of the positive developments” and “One negative impact” signal the paragraph purposes. However, the opening of the second paragraph is awkwardly divided: “As they become bored…” is a sentence fragment, and the ideas about past and present fashion could be linked more smoothly. Some transitions are mechanical, and the conclusion largely repeats the introduction rather than drawing together the reasons. Use clearer links between cause and effect, and ensure each paragraph develops one connected line of reasoning.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The response uses an adequate range for the topic, including terms such as “global fashion,” “versatility,” “fashion designers,” and “revealing clothing.” These choices make the main ideas understandable, and there is some attempt to use more specific vocabulary when describing clothing styles. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “people dressing,” “the worldwide fashion trends,” and “bold dressing.” Repetition of “fashion,” “trends,” and “people” also limits flexibility. Some wording, such as “the modesty of past men and women,” does not express the intended comparison naturally. Aim for more precise collocations and vary references to fashion and its influence; this would make the argument clearer and more fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex forms, including “While it has brought various positive changes…” and “As they become bored…”. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or inaccurate. “As they become bored of wearing same kinds of clothes…” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence, while “Even it's a child, a young adult or an old person” has an incorrect construction. Agreement and verb forms also need attention in “The modesty … are gone” and “young ladies mostly wear.” Articles and plurals are sometimes missing or inconsistent, as in “wearing same kinds of clothes.” These errors do not prevent understanding, but more reliable sentence construction and proofreading would improve accuracy.
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